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Character Creation / Re: Amane Petrichor
« on: March 16, 2018, 03:53:07 AM »
It's a very good first attempt there are just a few small things I feel I should mention just to look busy.
  • She is a bit of a lightweight, that's fine but should probably be made clear somewhere
  • What exactly do you mean by 'explorer' in the Occupation?
  • Is there a reason why she wanted to become a huntress? It's a dangerous position and it doesn't look like she is following in the footsteps of anyone.
  • We aim for 2-3 weaknesses so another one would be nice although they can be more specific than 'weak'
  • Having an apartment is fine but we would probably like some justification for where the funds came from, probably parents/adopted parents but can't hurt to be specific.
But like I said a very good first attempt.

Introductions, birthdays, and departures. / Re: Hi, Iím Inexhaustive
« on: March 16, 2018, 03:40:41 AM »
Welcome and sorry about the muffin. See you've found the WiP section easy enough but in case you haven't yet we have a discord,, which might be helpful for quicker question responses.

Regardless take care and best of luck with you character.

Character Creation / Re: Lilly "Melody" Meier
« on: March 13, 2018, 08:35:29 PM »
There is nothing to say no to but I would point that given the team based nature of schools in Remnant transferring is probably a bigger thing than it is in our world so more detail there would be nice. You also still have indents after each section which look kinda strange with the first few sections. You could also put more detail on what exact dance style she prefers/has most experience with as most do specialise and is there any dance related events which happen after she was 12?

Not enough to not get approval tho. +1

'So you drink this for the taste?' Ramalia continued to laugh loudly gesturing at the bottle in Brock's hands. 'I've lived for weeks off raw meat and even that was better tasting than ...most...'alcoholic beverages.' The former scavenger continued pausing slightly as she caught herself about to insult a hosts offering. Leaning back up slowly Ramalia finally adds. 'These are good though, and yours by scavenger's rights... but I guess you people might do things differently here.' Finishing in a bit of a huff: Ramalia took the new unopened bottle in hand, opened it and gave it a quick swig before putting it back on the table.

'So is there reason why I'm the only one drinking?' Ramalia asks she gets to her feet and starts stretching out her long limbs out the desert born girl turns back around and faces the worst drinking buddies in all of Remnant. 'Is it a Valeisan thing or do you both have classes soon?' Ramalia continued visibly confused, the world of Vacuo often seemed foreign to her growing up in an isolated tribe but Vale seemed a hundred times more confounding. Guess that's why I'm here. Ramalia thought to herself resignedly.

Approved Characters / Re: Prism Skylark
« on: March 10, 2018, 04:39:53 AM »
You still have a few 'Veil's when I think you mean Vale but aside from that 10/10 would destroy her town again. +1

'Whiskey huh?' Ramalia began picking up the new bottle and giving it a closer look through the glass. 'Is that the one made from grains or fruit or was it potatoes? You city dwellers have so many names for fire water, surely there only needs to be strong and week.' Ramalia continued with the clear confidence of someone who had had this conversation multiple times before. After running her fingers over the scratched out label Ramalia placed the bottle back on the table unopened, even someone of her size needed to pace herself and although Ramalia had a relatively full stomach it was still going to fit her pretty hard.

Squinting at the two other students as she noticed she was the only who had drank the offered beverage. 'It's considered poor form for a host not to partake in an offering and to refuse it.' Ramalia explained as she picked up the opened bottle and once again passed it to Brock. Lounging back in her chairs Ramalia made sure she got herself comfortable and stable for when the alcohol hit.

Sighing loudly Ramalia relaxed her gaze and continued. 'I assume you are a student as well.' the former scavenger begins, looking over at Tristan 'Is this a common past time for students then? Drinking fir... whisky in a secluded room? Might have to consider a transfer... although I'd also have to know the animal policy I guess.' Ramalia laughed loudly, the rich sound bouncing down the hallway.

Character Creation / Re: Nami
« on: March 10, 2018, 03:45:32 AM »
I feel you are going to get put through the ring by another mod but if you are OK with that it's functional.


Character Creation / Re: Nami
« on: March 10, 2018, 12:14:21 AM »
Why would people put so much effort in dealing with the White Fang? Hunters already exist and many hunters are Faunus, even if there wasn't is the WF really such a threat that a bunch of scientists decide: Evil Scientist 1 'you know how we deal with this problem? Evil Scientist 2 'We'll steal children.' Evil Scientist 1 'But won't they be useless for a decade?' Evil Scientist 2 'Yea but do you want be efficent or do you want to be evil?' Evil Scientist 1 'Evil obviously'

Teams / Re: First year Vacuo Team
« on: March 08, 2018, 10:39:01 PM »
Welcome. Bad luck with VLPS but hopefully we can find enough people to keep pushing forward.

Character Creation / Re: Nami
« on: March 08, 2018, 07:02:19 PM »
Well there little wrong with this character I would like some explanation on why they are turning humans into faunus, there seems to be pretty wide spread discrimination and 'science' isn't a very good reason.

There is also no canon example of a semblance change although I suppose you could argue that personality shifts could result in such.

There is nothing really wrong with this profile it just opens a few problematic doors so we are going to be asking a bit more detail than usual.

Whatever annoyance Ramalia felt as her question went mostly ignored was quickly mollified by the offering of drinks. Being from a desert people such offerings were considered far more significant than those from the temperate region like Vale. Her gauntlets folding back up her arm as she reached for the offered bottle, examining the red liquid with a sideways glance before opening the bottle, giving it a quick sniff before finally taking a swig. 'So what is this stuff anyway?' Ramalia asked finally coming up for air, gasping loudly as the crimson liquid burns her throat and passing the rest of the bottle to Brock.

'Well I suppose introductions are in order, I'm Ramalia. Shade student but have taken a few weeks to explore the other Kingdoms.' The former scavenger continued pulling out two chairs putting her butt in one and lifting her legs over the other. Ramalia's eyes flashed a steel blue for a few seconds as she sent her hawk back to roost, she was planning on being here for a while.   

Teams / Re: Hat Draw
« on: March 08, 2018, 07:16:44 AM »
I would assume it's fitemenerd's attempt at a character sheet, I've sent them a PM but they haven't been on since posting this.


It proved a wise idea to abandon the bridge, close behind Avery's heels a huge crack shook the entire vassal as the supposedly impervious glass gave way under the tremendous pressure washing the now vacant bridge with a hail of razor sharp shards as well as exposing it to the elements from the outside. It was going to be a long walk to the engine room where Dorian had hunkered down but aside from being thrown against the wall as their ship continued deeper into the storm, knocked about by the ever increasing waves in the storm's last gasp and ending these intruders, there was little danger between the two third years.

Speaking of their fellow third year Dorian was a bit slower to respond than usual, his breath only getting more and more haggard as time passed. 'If you...think... that's for the... best.' Dorian began before audibly taking a huge gulp of air. 'Although I'm sure Aurum and Topaz are also in need of help.' The high pitched beeping of warning siren could be heard through the communication and they only seemed to be getting worse.

If Avery continues to the engine room he will find Dorian almost completely drained from exhaustion, dashing from console to console in a desperate but clearly deteriorating attempt at keeping the ship stable. 'I'm...fine... Dorian. It's... all under control.' Dorian managed to croak out in stark contrast to the chaos around him. A chaos which only grew as the lights faded for a few seconds before being replaced by a dull red glow. Emergency power. In the darkened room Dorian stumbled over to a monitor and could only look at Avery in horror, the ship was capsizing.

Topaz and Aurum

Drenched in freezing sea water Topaz could be forgiven to act rashly but it was still a rash act with rather serious consequences. Already weakened the rock pillar gave way under the third years strike as it cleaved to only the inside part off but drastically worsened the growing cracks as well. The pillar gave way and just as Aurum dropped Golden Time the chaos well and truly broke loose. An almost unimaginable jet of water shot through the now gapping hole in the ships up straight into Topaz's face, forcing the swordwoman back. The droid leaping to respond to Aurum's orders tried to assist, helping catch Topaz as well as trying to seal the hole.

Unfortunately as water continued to spray around the confined area it was inevitably going to hit the exposed electronics. Fitted with counter measures to prevent the worst they still took time to activate and in the scant few seconds enough electricity to power this part of the ship coursed through the water, taking out all the droids and unless the students could do anything to stop it caused significant aura damage to themselves. The same flash off of the main lights to be replaced a few seconds later with a red glow. A red glow that given the drenched surroundings covered their corridor with a macabre undertone.

Being at the center of the torrent but Topaz in a incredibly precarious position as the destroyed husks of droids where shot back further into the ship. Aurum was already moving out and his bubbles did a lot to get the students away from the incoming surge of water. It would not last forever however as the loudest groan from the ships hull followed by the incredibly unusual feeling of their balance shifting, well flipping would be more accurate. A huge splash reverberated from outside followed by the slight but never the less present sensation of sinking.

Heavy footfalls sounded throughout the academy as Ramalia stomped her way through the normally quite halls. Vale was very different from Vacuo and the former scavenger was eager to jot down any differences her tribe might be interested in. A squawk sounded from above as Ramalia's eagle circled from above making sure her master wouldn't get lost in the new environment. The Vacuo student glanced up at the sky and gave the bird a subtle wave to scan the area outside as Ramalia went inside. Well trained eyes scan the room immediately as Ramalia enters, a room clearly out of the way somewhat leaving the wild girl alone with two Beacon students. Although she had left her cannon at the loaned locker Ramalia still had her robotic sleeves, retracted around her shoulders, and picked at the joints as she continued to examine her surroundings; how the walls are constructed? How is the building laid out? What sort of technology do they implement?

An outburst drew Ramalia's attention, a harsh burst of shouting which faded out as quickly as it began. A slightly quieter mechnical clunk followed as the sleeve on her right arm locked into place, humming quietly. 'Is there a problem here?' Ramalia asks still a couple of meters behind the two beacon students. Aware she was still not the most social aware person Ramalia's sense of obligation overwhelmed any semblance of common sense. The wise leader, the smart teach and the strong protect. Ramalia repeats a tribal mantra in her head as she waits for a response. Shifting her significant weight on her forward left leg Ramalia let her augmented arm hang heavy in front of her.

Approved Characters / Re: Smokey Emberstone
« on: March 03, 2018, 12:17:38 AM »
Yea fixed everything in WiP +1 approval. Good job.

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