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Plot Zone / Re: The even softer reboot [Plot Signup]
« on: July 28, 2022, 03:45:01 AM »
Okay and with that we have 12 characters, aka 3 teams.
So think recruitment will close there for now, and now we just need to look into who would make good teams.

Is there a character that you think would work well with yours, or just a character/player you want to play with then feel free to say so here.

Edit: Actually to facilitate this slightly (so it doesn't take several weeks) I'll send each of you a discord message directly, all requests might not be possible but having something to start with will speed it up significantly.

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Approved Characters / Re: Lucas Meridiem
« on: July 24, 2022, 03:52:59 AM »
Edits approved

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Approved Characters / Re: Iris Astria
« on: July 23, 2022, 08:25:38 AM »
All good, 2/2.

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WiP Characters / Re: finka allen
« on: July 15, 2022, 04:01:55 AM »
First off welcome to the site!

One thing to note, we don't use any canon characters on this site like Lionheart or Torchwick (and there never is a fall of Beacon).

Secondly, for your profile I'd recommend copying the template from here, as well as just giving the template guide there a read.
https://rwbyfanon.com/index.php?topic=86.0

Edit: Here is a version of the template with your character's colour, so just copy that over and then replace 'Text here' with what you had written.
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[color=#40E0D0][size=18px][u][b]CHARACTER[/b][/u][/size][/color]

[color=#40E0D0][b][u]Name:[/u][/b][/color] Text here

[color=#40E0D0][b][u]Age:[/u][/b][/color] Text here

[color=#40E0D0][b][u]Species and Gender:[/u][/b][/color] Text here

[color=#40E0D0][b][u]Symbol:[/u][/b][/color] Text here

[color=#40E0D0][b][u]Occupation:[/u][/b][/color] Text here

[color=#40E0D0][b][u]Appearance:[/u][/b][/color] Text here

[color=#40E0D0][b][u]History:[/u][/b][/color] Text here

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[color=#40E0D0][b][u]Aura and Semblance:[/u][/b][/color] Text here

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[color=#40E0D0][size=18px][u][b]WEAPON[/b][/u][/size][/color]

[color=#40E0D0][b][u]Name:[/u][/b][/color] Text here

[color=#40E0D0][b][u]Primary Form:[/u][/b][/color] Text here

[color=#40E0D0][b][u]Secondary Form:[/u][/b][/color] Text here

[color=#40E0D0][b][u]Dust Functions:[/u][/b][/color] Text here

[color=#40E0D0][b][u]History:[/u][/b][/color] Text here

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Approved Characters / Re: Ferra Mars
« on: July 13, 2022, 04:14:05 AM »
Great that addresses my main concerns, +1.

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Approved Characters / Re: Ferra Mars
« on: July 12, 2022, 05:13:03 PM »
Been a while since the last review.
 
Love the art and think it's a nice history. The only thing I'm uncertain of is when she felt capable did she then attend a primary combat school (like signal) or was she "homeschooled" by her parents, and if there is any specific reason she goes to Beacon at age 19 rather than 17 as most students do? That might just be the age difference between her and Ruka so that they joined together?

Do her summoned hands attack her target or can they find targets and attack them by themselves, could she basically have 8 drones with dust UZI's flying around and targeting by themselves? My main concern is the fact that she can bring 5 times the firepower and physical strength of other characters, with the only downside being that it slows her down.

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Approved Characters / Re: Diana Farran
« on: July 12, 2022, 04:54:27 PM »
Previous edit post has the old version. Honestly weren’t as many changes as I had originally thought, just some minor updates in terms of ability and lore (Now that we know Atlas flies)

Changelog:
  • Apperance: Felt she was a bit too tall when compared to the other artworks so slightly lowered her height, minor change to clothing description.
  • History: Minor changes to update the lore that Atlas is flying over Mantle now, rather than just a different city as we thought from the world of remnant.
  • Personality: Just moved some photos around
  • Semblance: Removed the description that it’s impossible for her to steal aura as I think it is more compelling that it is a power she might have but is too scared to ever use, It’s not anything that is going to come up in combat and more of a narrative device that could be interesting for her

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Plot Zone / Re: The even softer reboot
« on: July 10, 2022, 04:15:42 PM »
Quote
Hey Vision
I would love to be part of this.
Signed Vision.

I'm planning to put forward Diana Farran, though I will be making some minor updates to her profile.
In terms of combat, she is more focused on ranged using a rifle and dust, and has a support semblance that can help heal or recover aura. Personality-wise she is a bit awkward but highly empathic.

I will also sign up Bastet Nin as a backup if we need more characters to fill a team.
She is a melee focus brawler that can teleport to her weapon, allowing her a lot of mobility. Her personality is certainly more boisterous with an emphasis on creativity, if she manages to stay interested.

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Plot Zone / The even softer reboot [Plot Signup]
« on: July 10, 2022, 04:08:38 PM »
The general premise has been brought up in the discord channel but I will go over it here as well as handle recruitment (In a dastardly plot to get more people to post on the forum).

So we have previously discussed the idea of having a soft reboot tied with some changes to the board, but we haven't really set anything in stone on what or how. Rather than getting stuck in the minutiae of what that could entail for the board, characters, and the world I propose we have a soft soft reboot. We will make no changes to the site infrastructure, setting, or anything like that. The focus here is to get people to post, to achieve that goal I propose that we focus on setting up first-year beacon teams as they are by far the most popular characters, and have an easy first thread plot hook in the form of initiation (Describe your characters landing strategy, run around and kill some grimm, meet up with teammates, kill more grimm, find something. Easy plot with no need to plan anything). To simplify setting up these teams we will pretty much ignore any previously established character lore, hence reboot.

Requirements
1. Your character needs to have a profile on the site.
However, as many of us will want to update characters they don't have to be fully approved, as long as they are in Character Editing or Character Creation they can be used to facilitate some speed (and in case approvals are slow since you know we haven't done them in a while)
2. Your character is being rebooted (ish).
Outside of their team we aren't being overly strict about this, however the point is just to help facilitate story elements. If your character has been influenced by a previous thread or has an important relationship with another character no one is going to stop you from keeping that canon, but too much of that could bog things down.
3. You are okay with getting discord pings.
Now I don't want to be spammed on discord anymore than the rest of you, but a simple message in a group chat to say "I posted, it's X turn now" and potentially a ping if they haven't posted in say 3 days, is perfectly reasonable.
4. Post the elevator pitch of your character here (this will count as recruitment).
This doesn't have to be much, just the broad strokes of the characters personalty and combat style (Mainly so we can avoid having a team where everyone is an anti-social sniper)

Sidenote: I am just making up these requirements and using "we" so it sounds more official. I would 100% welcome input on these points. 

Based on the interest in the discord thread we will likely need more than one team, however, if we are lacking enough players to fill two teams then I will be happy to be on both teams (with different characters), and will gladly open that option to others as well. Once this has been up for a week or two I figure we will start to look at what teams could be made both in terms of characters and potentially names, but we will get to that when we get to it.


Recruitment


Team Clovers[CLVS]
Metroidhunter: Cloe Zeu
ReaperJoe: Lucas Meridiem
Zwei Not: Juno Varia
Moth: Prism Skylark

Team Lily[LILY]
Xarias Fury: Lavender du Lac
Snek: Indigo Yaaxulkan
Vision: Diana Levone
FunkyMonkey: Yasha Krasny

Team Picante[PCNT]
Nathan67003: Nathan Eau
Kaliot: Pyre Persephone Delanto
MonsterManic: Tina Allan
Aethon Shaan: Cyrus Blaze


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Approved Characters / Re: Diana Farran
« on: July 09, 2022, 08:17:46 PM »
I've missed the RP on this forum, so I actually want to take the first step in starting it up again.

Moved to editing to update the character to be more in line with the "new" Atlas lore (will also take this update as a basis if we ever get around to doing our reboot).

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Introductions, birthdays, and departures. / Re: Hi
« on: July 16, 2021, 10:24:30 AM »
Hey, welcome to the site :D I'd recommend joining our discord if you haven't already, it's where most of our community is currently. If you ever have any questions you can hit up that channel on the discord or feel free to message me directly.

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Plot Zone / Re: Historical Hearsay [Plot Signup]
« on: June 09, 2021, 05:57:24 PM »
I'm certainly interested, probably with Diana could see some potential with bringing her on a longer mission for medical/healing semblance utility. Then again she is a first-year and probably not the strongest fighter for a particularly strong grimm.

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Approved Characters / Re: Diana Farran
« on: May 02, 2021, 03:03:31 PM »
Edit: Moved back without making any changes, will make such updates when we do the soft reboot.

Diana was made long before we had seen Atlas and Mantle in the show so think it's time for an update with the hope of seeing some life on the forum again.
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[color=#839CA5][size=18px][u][b]CHARACTER[/b][/u][/size][/color]

[color=#839CA5][b][u]Name:[/u][/b][/color] Diana Farran

[color=#839CA5][b][u]Age:[/u][/b][/color] 18 (6th of Amare, 62 AC)

[color=#839CA5][b][u]Species and Gender:[/u][/b][/color] Human, Female

[color=#839CA5][b][u]Symbol:[/u][/b][/color]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/3LrSFQv.png[/img]
[color=#839CA5][b][u]Occupation:[/u][/b][/color] Advanced combat student. Beacon, first year

[color=#839CA5][b][u]Appearance:[/u][/b][/color] Whilst of a generally average female height (165cm/5'4") at a place like Beacon Academy Diana just seems to be shorter than her peers, possibly due to slightly poor posture or just her small frame (48kg/106lbs). She has gentle eyes of a violet shade. Her wavy shoulder length brown hair is usually kept in a slightly untidy ponytail with long loose strands framing her face. Still adjusting to the climate in Vale she typically wears a loose fitting white blouse with a blue dress that has been trimmed down to ensure it doesn't restrict her movement, her weapon collapses into a holster on her belt. On all missions she wears a white choker that her dad had given her, she has a fire dust crystal that can clip on it to help with arctic temperatures. When around the campus she wears the uniform with some short socks and is more likely to have her hair loose, and occasionally wears some earrings or makeup.
[img]https://i.imgur.com/qUelh3M.png[/img]
[spoiler=Chibi][img]https://i.imgur.com/PHjxUVH.png[/img][/spoiler]
[color=#839CA5][b][u]History:[/u][/b][/color]
[spoiler=TLDR]Diana grew up with her family in Mantle, as is often the case for families in the defunct capital they were poor and hard working. With a brother in the military and her father working in dust mines and mother in several part-time jobs, Diana started taking on a fair amount of the house chores from an early age. Not the most inspiring place to grow up she became infatuated with the huntsmen and huntresses that would protect the transport into town, as they seemed fuller of life then anyone in the dying capital. Eventually the dad would take a managment position that allowed him to move the family to Atlas proper, and for Diana to start at the simple combat schools before moving on to Atlas academy. Her semblance allows her to combine and move her aura which caught the eye of some researchers. Their curiosity would culminate with her trying to steal aura from someone, which caused her to lose control and attack the person. She ran away from the academy and briefly started studying to be a paramedic but ended up trying to become a huntress again next year at Beacon.[/spoiler]
There is little question that since the great war Atlas has been the center of Solitas rather than Mantle, which was made official as Atlas became the new capital of the kingdom. However a city like Mantle doesn’t just disappear overnight there are still those who live there, though fewer and fewer remain. One family that was still held up in Mantle was that of the Farrans, a household consisting of a father (Corbin), mother (Arcene), an elder son (Allo) and a younger daughter named Diana. The family lived in an apartment over a failing restaurant where the mother worked as a chef and waitress depending on how many clients were there. She also ran her own tailoring business from home, doing patch jobs for pocket change. Dianas father would be gone for the week only returning from the dust mines on the weekend, her brother who is four years older than her and had left their home to start his career in the military. Whilst the family had to work to stay afloat they were still better off than some of their neighbours who lived in such desperate poverty. Under such living conditions Diana had to grow up fast, even at a young age she ended up doing a lot of the general housework just to make things easier on her parents.

Diana would often wait outside for the transport from the mines, in part because she was excited to welcome her dad home, though she always got a bit sad seeing how hopeless some of the fanus passengers looked. She also wanted to see the guards of the transports, these warriors always had such extravagant fashion and weapons, compared to the hopeless passengers the warriors seemed to be bursting with life. These were the first huntsmen and huntresses she ever saw. With neither a waitress or a dust miner being too appealing as career paths she kept dreaming of becoming one of those warriors from the transport, those that traveled the world dedicating their lives to protecting others. She was reluctant to tell her parents of this at first, unsure of how they’d take it, but when she did she got nothing but support and it was all she needed to apply to [INSERT ATLAS “SIGNAL”]. Though initially pessimistic about having to move to Atlas proper she thoroughly enjoyed her time at the school. She was a bit weak when it came to combat (and social) skills but more than made up for it with her weapon design and academic prowess. Once her time there was up she naturally applied to the Atlas Academy and got accepted.

Diana wasn’t the only Farren where it seemed things were looking up, her brother Allo who was now fully in the army had been selected to undergo additional training to become a pilot. Her father had been promoted to a management position (probably because they wanted to have someone the miners knew that they could talk to, and he was one of the few non-Fanus there), after moving to Atlas her mother even had some success in her tailoring business. This seemed like a moment of prosperity for the entire family, except there was something that felt [i]off[/i] for Diana during her first weeks at the Academy. Her semblance lets her combine her aura with someone else during which she can leave behind some of her own, not the greatest of combat semblances yet it seemed to intrigue some of the professors extremely. She would occasionally be brought to one of the labs to measure the extent of her semblance. At first she was excited to have a room full of experts helping her understand her semblance, but there was something about this highly scientific approach to aura that made her uneasy. The culmination of this sensation came when she was collected by some of the staff in the evening and brought to an abandoned building on the outskirts of the town. Upon entering she saw a fanus boy tied to a chair wearing a black and white uniform with a red symbol on the back, the uniform of the white fang. Supposedly he was here to start a terror cell in Atlas, however she had a hard time believing that the White fang would send a teenager younger than her up here alone, this seemed like the silly idea of someone acting alone. It was first now it dawned on her why she was there. The researchers had speculated that she could use her semblance in reverse, to steal aura, however they didn’t want to risk testing it on someone at the school. Here however they had a “terrorist”, someone no one would miss if anything went wrong. Whilst Diana had no interest in testing this part of her ability and was disgusted by the entire affair she didn't have the confidence to stand up to them, so she quietly knelt next to the boy and began.

At this point it’s important to remember that a person's aura is the manifestation of their soul, the most basic part of what makes someone who they are. By combining her aura with someone else's she could occasionally get a glimpses of what was essential to their being. The fanus before her wasn’t evil, she felt his ambition, his strong sense of justice and of duty. However there was one key difference between them, where she was merciful and wouldn’t strike an unarmed opponent he was more pragmatic, if he felt that his opponent was a danger to his people he would strike without remorse. When Diana started to pull on his aura it seems she got something else, for a brief moment their personalities mixed and she experienced his pragmatism. In that crucial moment all she knew was that before her was someone whose sole purpose for being in Atlas was to hurt her countrymen, her friends, her family, so she acted.

Horrified by what she had done she packed her bags and ran away from the academy the same night. Those who had been there tried to reassure her that she had nothing to fear and that she was still welcome at the academy, she would have none of it. There and then she had decided to give up on becoming a huntress, she enrolled in a paramedical degree and tried to put her combat training behind her. However anyone who knew her for her time there could easily she that it wasn't right for her, she liked helping people but was clearly depressed in that role. Her parents were able to break through to her and suggested that now that their finances were stronger she could study in a different country, one with less of a scientific focus. She applied, and a year after she had originally started at Atlas academy she was now starting fresh at Beacon.

[img]https://i.imgur.com/uUiqj21.png[/img]
[color=#839CA5][b][u]Personality:[/u][/b][/color]
Being forced to grow up early her personality when moving to Atlas had been on the rough side, not uncaring but she had little patience for games and missed a lot of social cues. It took her some time to make friends but the few relationships she did form were particularly close. Her friends had helped her mellow out a bit and by the time she came to Beacon she was more willing to put herself out there, relax and enjoy herself. That being said she is hardly a social butterfly, she still comes off as a bit awkward at first. Part of the reason for that is that she struggles with her confidence, she will almost always sell herself short, not to be humble but because she both doubts and fears what she can do.

With the ability to get a slight experience of how others see the world she is an exceptionally empathetic person with a tendency of becoming a bit emotional. In her team she is devoted to trying to keep things running smoothly, she’ll gladly take the lion's share of the chores and occasionally bakes or cooks for her teammates. She starts to struggle when there is team infighting, generally staying quiet unless spoken too. An introvert at heart she does spend a lot of her time reading or working alone, and as such she does generally well in most her school subjects (still she never puts her hand up in a class even if she is certain of the answer). She is also a bit of a hopeless romantic, reading loads of romantic novels but gets extremely flustered whenever anyone seems to take interest in her. On the whole Diana is a kind and clever person though a bit awkward. She cares immensely for the people around her always encouraging and supporting them, she also completely fails to ever take her own advice.

[color=#839CA5][b][u]Aura:[/u][/b][/color] Her aura is of a [color=#839CA5]blue-silver colour[/color], its slightly stronger than that of an average first year student at Beacon, in part due to the semester she spent at Atlas academy and natural incline towards aura use.

[color=#839CA5][b][u]Semblance:[/u][/b][/color]Caduceus: By placing her hand on a living creature's chest and keeping it there for 10-15 seconds she is able to combine their auras. This has a few applications though most used is to transfer some of her own aura to someone else. Transferring is often invigorating for the recipient but it's usually a painful and tiring process for her. Though not strong enough to keep everyone “topped up”, in an emergency or when stumbling upon injured hunters she can sacrifice her own strength to get them in better shape. A side effect of her semblance is that by touching the fabric of what makes a person who they are she gains some insight what makes them tick, it figuratively lets her see how they see the world. However she has learned not to rely on it as a judge of character as some good people may have some undesirable characteristics that they have learned to overcome, and some evil people may seem like a saint.

In a non combat setting when using her semblance the recipient can use her aura to heal. For example if someone is bedridden recovering from wounds at 100% aura and Diana is at 100% aura they would recover faster, as if they had 200% aura. However since no person can have more than 100% aura this is only possible for as long as she is willing to sit there with them whilst they recover, since there is no aura transfer this process isn’t painful for either party.

She has only made one attempt to use her semblance to drain aura rather than giving it away, the process took a lot longer (nearly a minute) and in the end she didn't actually gain any aura. Taking aura and giving it is fundamentally different that she will never have that ability. However that isn't clear to her and she will likely never figure it out since she refuses to ever take that risk again, afraid of what it could do.

[spoiler=Numbers] Using her semblance would take 20% of her aura and fatigue her 25% to give someone else 40% of their aura (Up to but not exceeding 100%).

As for healing recovery would be at double rate. An injury that would take 20 days to recover from is done in 12-13 if she dedicates all her time (barr sleeping) for the full period (However In total this takes up more time, 12 days for two people, or 20 days for one[/spoiler]
[color=#839CA5][b][u]Combat Behavior:[/u][/b][/color] Whilst a strong fighter compared to the general populous at the academy she perhaps one of the weaker first years. She can confidently handle the basic forms of grim herself, with more advanced forms she’ll try to avoid them rather than fight. She is very uneasy of fighting any human or faunus opponents, even in practice.

In combat her emphasis is on supporting her teammates rather than dealing damage, by using the dust functions of her rifle she attempts to lock down (ice) or obstruct the view(steam) of the opponent. In general she prefers to keep her opponents at a medium range where she is most accurate with her rifle, with her team in between her and them. She has no shield or armour leaving her vulnerable to ranged attacks, relying on cover for protection. In melee combat she utilises her martial technique to compensate for her lack of strength, which works against an average opponent however anyone who is particularly physically strong (or better technique) can certainly overpower her. When she has her weapon in its melee form it completely removes her ranged and dust capacities, making her a lot less effective.

Though she only has some limited paramedical training she still carries a basic first aid kit in a pouch on her thigh with some bandaids, bandages, sterilising alcohol, pain killers, dust powered ice pack and a suture kit, though she rarely has any use for them as most wounds are healed by aura she still carries it with her on all missions.

[color=#839CA5][size=18px][u][b]WEAPON[/b][/u][/size][/color]
[color=#839CA5][b][u]Name:[/u][/b][/color] Eclipse

[img]https://i.imgur.com/6wAHsqP.png[/img]
[color=#839CA5][b][u]Primary Form:[/u][/b][/color] Rifle
Diana’s weapon is essentially a rifle with two barrels and a bayonet, though as with most handmade weapons in Remnant there is more going on in this simple design.The lower of the two barrels is a single shot rifle for medium range, here she can fire twelve rounds before having to reload. These shots may not have the stopping power of the other barrel but they still pack a punch and function as her main source of ranged damage. The top barrel is more reminiscent of a bolt action sniper rifle, here she can fire much larger bullets, though only one can be loaded at a time. Whilst it can be a high impact sniper round, she usually uses it to fire a lower velocity but larger dust rounds to deliver a greater payload.

[img]https://i.imgur.com/rxf0W5V.png[/img]
[color=#839CA5][b][u]Secondary Form:[/u][/b][/color] Compact & Sword
The pivotal part of the design is that of the circular handle, as both it and the parts around it can rotate. This is most obvious as the weapon is taking its compact form. Here the stock collapses to cover the blade which in turn retracts pushing the handle out of the central ring, this is the form her weapon is usually carried on her belt. The sword handle is protruding for easy access in a surprise encounter, in order to get the full rifle she simply needs to push the handle back into the ring before pulling it off her belt. She designed the sword to detach from the main body of the weapon in order to keep the blade light which is important for someone who isn’t all that strong. As the triggers for her rifle are on the sword handle she can’t shoot when detached.

[color=#839CA5][b][u]Dust Functions:[/u][/b][/color]
The main of her dust utility comes from the top barrel, her preferences are for ice and steam. Using the ice to control the battlefield and lock down opponents and steam to obstruct line of sight from ranged opponents. Whilst those are her favourites she does still carry a few fire, electricity and gravity rounds for utility.

[color=#839CA5][b][u]History:[/u][/b][/color] Diana's weapon is one that has gone through a multitude of variations since its inception. The changes were both to find a design she was effective with, but also to ensure it was reliable in the Atlas climate. Early renditions were too heavy to use in melee until she allowed the blade to fully detach. When fully automatic the cold would cause the oils in the rifle to thicken making it jam, the newer mechanism has a significantly slower rate of fire but is far more reliable. The top barrel was added as she learned more about the application of dust allowing for the use of larger ammunition whilst kept reliable by feeding it manually. Some of these limitations could be reversed now that she lives in Vale, however so far she has only removed rubber from the grips since there's no risk of frostbite.
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MiA Characters / Re: Menrva Star
« on: April 30, 2020, 05:37:50 PM »
Wow I am incredibly sorry I didn't get back to you after this, was so focused on Discord and it slipped my mind (the whole global pandemic was rather distracting as well). If ever there is a delay even a fraction of this long feel free to ping me / other staff, as this was way too much and I can only apologize.

Anyhoo, the story has been addressed and is in a good spot now. Most of the character is in a good spot, however, the big issue I still have is the "tech giving free semblances". As we are hardly a mechanically driven site balance is less of a concern, my approach comes more from trying to be fair to other members. It can feel cheap for someone if another character has their own semblance as well as their characters semblance because of tech, so we try to be careful about allowing semblance-like abilities to come from other sources (for instance why we basically ignore Faunus traits as that's some characters semblance)

So the ability for her semblance to control the suit and shift power to different things for a specific boost in power fits nicely with the character and is reasonable tech angle with the semblance (within reason of course).

With that as the semblance the extreme light projection and flight seem like too much for me. We have a few characters with flight(ish) but in those cases it's either tied to or helped by their semblance, we also haven't seen that kind of flight tech outside of ships, so with everything else going on with this character I really don't see any way to make free flight happen without redesigning a ton.

In terms of the hard light using it to make weapons or one or two simple structures is fine, but 16 constructs are waaay too much, once again aura constructs are a popular semblance but even those are far more limited than what this character gets for free. The examples we have in the show are pretty restrictive (Velvet is the most advanced but Watts needed to set up the rings for a simple wall). Maybe something like one on each arm, giving her an interesting weakness (not just inexperienced). Go for double blades for offense, one blade and one shield for defense, maybe help or protect teammates by dropping her offense entirely to use both projectors to give cover. Seem reasonable?

Hud is fine, Shock absorption is fine, releasing said shock for massive physical boost is a semblance I've seen before, same goes for repulsing attacks back.

Hopefully, you can see that this is way too much stuff for a character to get for free, especially one that also gets a ton of extra features from the story with the whole basically youngest medical doctor ever.

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MiA Characters / Re: Menrva Star
« on: February 25, 2020, 09:46:54 AM »
Always nice to see nonstudent characters on the site, will be interested to see what you do with them (also love medical characters).

Nice to see characters with art. A minor point about that is I typically recommend using Imgur for hosting, as I know those links last ages (discord might be totally fine, I just don't have any experience with them).

The timeframe was a bit confusing to follow. It seems like she starts her medical degree at 12 (which is too young even for a prodigy), 4 years later is the conference, and then it moves 3 years at the end which adds up to 19. Perhaps I've missed a step?

And that brings me to my main concern. Surgery is famously, or rather infamously, an incredibly long education. Ignoring cybernetics and everything else from starting college to being fully qualified as a surgeon takes around 13 years (US: 4 year premed, 4 year med, 5 years residency / Norway: 6 years medical, 6.5 residency).

Now we can certainly find some way to make this work, however to start we were wondering what your concept for the character is?

For instance, if the goal is someone who does perform surgery then perhaps they are still in their residency. During residency they would be working at a hospital and in the later years start preforming surgery under supervision.

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