Author Topic: Cole Ashton  (Read 3567 times)

Krazeek

  • Newbie

  • Offline
  • *

  • 8
  • Karma:
    +0/-0
    • View Profile
Cole Ashton
« on: August 10, 2018, 08:17:25 PM »
CHARACTER

Name: Cole Ashton

Age: 18

Species and Gender: Human Male

Symbol:  A light-gray compass rose with the needle facing West.

Occupation: Sophomore exchange student in Beacon Academy.

Appearance:
Cole Ashton is a teenager raised from humble beginnings on the streets. He has a lithe and athletic physique, standing 5’11” while weighing in at only 134 lbs. His tanned skin and brown eyes give him a very woodsy appearance, while his close-cropped gray hair is both practical and functional.

Many aspects of Cole’s outfit reflect his frugal nature. He always wears gray denim jeans that are fraying at the edges and a plain white t-shirt, completed with a black belt. His tonfa named Silver Screen are always held by a clip on the back of his belt, always in easy access. He also wears a gray bandanna tied around his right wrist, a gift from his mother to always remind him to do what’s right.

Cole’s demeanor reflects his life on the streets. Although he’d love to remove it to become more empathetic, he shows a scar down his left cheek from a knife attack he got as a kid. His low-pitch voice and forward walk display his determination. While he smiles and jokes when relaxed, his face shows his dedication in combat, and his catch phrase is: ‘I didn’t fight to make it this far to be taken out by a punk like you.’

History:
Cole was born 18 years ago on the rough streets of Mantle in Atlas. A child of the slums, he was raised solely by his mother, who tried to teach him respect and dignity. His mother never told him about his father, a soldier of the Atlas army who raped her during one of his drunken shore leaves. Also, he had a younger sister who died in childbirth, but haunts his sleep occasionally and he claims she talks to him.

Life was hard for Cole and his mother living in a small shack in the Skids section of Mantle. He never had much of anything to go on, and would sometimes be forced to steal food to survive. However, he never stole more than he needed, and would always remember his debts for potential future compensation.

Cole had to form a gang with some of the other boys who lived in the area, and formed two good friends in the group. Forrest was an older boy who had gone to school for a short time before his father lost his job and they had to move to the slums. Scarlet was a girl who he adopted as protector to her.

When Cole was walking through the shopping district of Mantle, he saw a report on the TVs of a group of Huntsmen and Huntresses who fended off a Grimm incursion into Mantle, and immediately knew he wanted to become a Huntsman just like them. He told his friends about it, and they thought it would be fun to form a group to train themselves.

Cole found two small lengths of pipe, with T-intersections, and made a rudimentary pair of tonfa from them. Forrest found a plank of wood and rubbed it against the bricks until he whittled it down into a crude sword. Scarlet found a wooden dowel and used it as a quarterstaff. The group would train constantly with these weapons, and they each got quite proficient in using them.

When a gang from a different part of the slums attacked them, they managed to fend them off quite well, but their fake weaponry proved no match for the knives of the other gangers. To make sure he would never forget that fact, the other gang held Cole down while the leader cut a deep slash in his cheek.

As Cole laid on the street in immense pain, his focus awakened his aura, and his wound closed up. While the scar is still there, his friends were amazed at how quickly he had recovered. Forrest helped him as time went by in teaching all he had been taught.

When they got old enough, they took a trip to Atlas Academy’s Mantle satellite campus to try out for the academy. During his dreams, he saw his sister again, and she told him that he was to be the hero of the Skids, to bring the people out of poverty and in to the working world. Upon awakening, he saw this as a premonition, and dedicated himself to the task at hand.

Cole and his friends all made it into the academy thanks to their vigilant practice as well as Forrest’s teachings. However, their class schedules were different, and they found themselves distanced in this unknown area.

Cole maintains contact with his mother by writing her from school, and occasionally passes by his friends on campus and in the dorms where they live. His weaponry teacher, Professor Rosado, took pity on him and helped him build his trademark weapons, the Silver Screen.

Professor Rosado also helped him with his studies, since Cole had no formal education. Through sheer determination and focus, Cole was able to graduate the year by acing many of his tests.

During the second year, Cole was invited to exchange places with a student in Vale. He was initially excited about this opportunity to see the other areas of the world, but the people in Vale seem to hold a distrust of the citizens of Atlas, mostly due to the economic and political climate.

However, Cole proved his effectiveness when he fended off one of the Faunus in Vale from a group of bullies. He has no negative feelings about the Faunus race, as he grew up in similar conditions. Now in his second year, he is focused on becoming a Huntsman and the hero of his home town.

Personality:
Cole Ashton is a kid living in a dichotomy of status and mentality. He truly believes that he is destined for greatness, and has forgone any other impulse or belief in pursuit of this belief. He is quick in wit and in speed, tempered with an analytical

In terms of status, he was born in the Skids section of Mantle city in Atlas, but seeks to become the savior of the Skids and raise everyone from poverty. He tries to leave his past behind him now that he’s somewhat comfortable living in the dorms, but secretly fears returning to poverty.

In mentality, he focuses on studies and scholastic pursuits, but also believes he can talk to his sister who died in childbirth. He relaxes in the stories and history of both Atlas and the whole of Remnant, as well as in practicing the katas for his tonfa.

In the quest to become the hero of his home town, Cole is not afraid of getting into combat and showing himself as a hero. In fact, he relishes being up close in combat and defending the innocent and his teammates. His moral compass shows through in his willingness to be merciful to enemies that deserve mercy and to protect those who cannot protect themselves.

Aura and Semblance: Cole’s aura is a shadowy-gray color, which sometimes hides him in the darkness.

Resonance - Cole's voice is naturally resonant and carries well through the area without being loud. However, he can raise his voice to the level of a sonic attack. This attack is useful in the fact that it is only slightly weakened by the aura of others due to the vibrations.

As it’s based on his voice, it has limited range and power. It more delivers a weak area attack than a focused single-target attack. It hits all the targets in a ten yard, 180 degree area, causing minor damage and deafness to the targets.

Limitations: Because of the projection, he has to be in front of his team to use it without affecting them that much, as he can't focus it yet. Also, using it more than four times in a day gives him a sore throat, and trying times means he could go hoarse by using it too much.

Combat Behavior:
Cole uses his tonfa to parry attacks very rapidly. Due to this and the short range of his semblance and weapon attacks, he's usually up close and personal defending his friends.

In terms of style, Cole usually uses more of an Aikido style, focusing on defense and redirecting the opponent’s attacks. A small amount of Jiu-Jitsu is also evident in the throws and trips.

Cole’s tonfa only uses small-caliber rounds in his tonfa due to the space required, and so doesn’t put out a lot of damage. Despite this, his defensive skills give him the advantage when teamed with a high damage partner.

  • Limited range on all attacks.
  • Semblance and special dust ability can only be used a few times.
  • Very low damage output.

WEAPON

Name: Silver Screen

Form: Tonfa (reference Ellie's weapon from the anime 'Rave Master' for visuals). The rods are about 18 inches long, and the grips look similar to a cross between a hilt and a pistol grip.

The full length of the rod forms the barrel of the guns, and the grips hold a clip in them that can be used for normal rounds. They also hold a smaller compartment for dust when the shield is needed. This dust can be reloaded, but it takes time to do so, and is not as quick as most other combatants.

Dust Functions: The tonfa can form a web of dust between the two that allow them to shield the user. This shield only exists for five seconds, but enough time to block a few attacks. The material of the dust is reflected in the shield (so a fire shield would burn skin, lightning would shock people holding metallic objects, kinetic repulses the attacks blocked by the shield, etc). The Tonfa holds enough dust for 6 activations of the shield function.

History: Silver Screen was built by Cole during his freshman year at Atlas.
« Last Edit: August 14, 2018, 03:10:14 AM by Krazeek »

Dr. Gustave

  • Full Member

  • Offline
  • ***
  • The Nice Admin

  • 895
  • Karma:
    +229/-227
  • Personal Text
    Forgive me for what I must yabba dabba do
    • View Profile
Re: Cole Ashton, ready for review
« Reply #1 on: August 12, 2018, 12:27:36 PM »
Most everything is fine in and of itself but there're a few sticking points.

Occupation: Not an issue at all but I'm just letting you know you're going to have a hard time finding threads in Atlas.

Personality: Needs way more detail, right now he's basically a one-dimensional person. Check some approved characters to get an idea of what it should look like.

Semblance: Needs a range for how far his voice can travel and how loud he can get.

Combat Behavior: Needs more detail like personality but more important needs to show weaknesses.

Everything else seems fine.
Atlas: ShowHide
Mercenary: Kol Augur ~ The Judicator of Atlas
Speaking: #5C5054 Thinking: #EAC117

Mistral: ShowHide
Huntress-in-Training: Aca Roth ~ Member of Team RWND
Speaking: #E05260 Thinking: #EA857F
Huntress-in-Training: Brook Pallas ~ Member of Team CNBR
Speaking: #4863A0 Thinking: #98AFC7
Council Member: Phaedo Katsaros ~ Figurehead for Faunus/Human relations
Speaking: #667C26 Thinking: #B6CC76

Vacuo: ShowHide
40th Vytal Tournament Champion: Zabar Aga ~ Member of Team DAWN
Speaking: #CD7F32 Thinking: #EE9A4D

Vale: ShowHide
Huntress: Malina Nahualli-Roth ~ Leader of Team MCCA
Speaking: #993A64 Thinking: #8B0C44
Beacon Professor: Titania Printemps ~ Assistant Headmistress of Beacon Academy
Speaking: #4AA02C Thinking: #E55B3C
Drop-out: Durian Ghede ~ Former leader of team DFDL
Speaking: #E1BD27 Thinking: #AF8B00

Krazeek

  • Newbie

  • Offline
  • *

  • 8
  • Karma:
    +0/-0
    • View Profile
Re: Cole Ashton
« Reply #2 on: August 13, 2018, 11:13:07 PM »
I've made the required changes. While the weaknesses aren't listed, they're as follows:
  • Limited range on all attacks.
  • Semblance and special dust ability can only be used a few times.
  • Very low damage output

The character is semi-dimensional in that he is driven to overcome his poverty, but also has his psychoses and moral conflicts. If there are any other suggestions, please let me know.

Kingnoname1

  • Full Member

  • Offline
  • ***

  • 1032
  • Karma:
    +75/-1
  • Personal Text
    Here to chat, always.
    • View Profile
Re: Cole Ashton
« Reply #3 on: August 14, 2018, 01:45:23 AM »
I would recommend listing them in the profile. it's part of the combat behaviour section.
No criticism is too harsh so hit me with your best shot.

Calen Shrike - ASTC - First Year Beacon.

Saffron de Cortez - SALT - Third Year Atlas.

Amarant Lovis - (formerly of)ACCE - Headmaster of Atlas Academy

Ramalia - RASB - First Year Shade

Dr. Gustave

  • Full Member

  • Offline
  • ***
  • The Nice Admin

  • 895
  • Karma:
    +229/-227
  • Personal Text
    Forgive me for what I must yabba dabba do
    • View Profile
Re: Cole Ashton
« Reply #4 on: August 15, 2018, 01:35:23 AM »
It's all still very sparse on details but it is your first character so that's not a huge issue. +1
Atlas: ShowHide
Mercenary: Kol Augur ~ The Judicator of Atlas
Speaking: #5C5054 Thinking: #EAC117

Mistral: ShowHide
Huntress-in-Training: Aca Roth ~ Member of Team RWND
Speaking: #E05260 Thinking: #EA857F
Huntress-in-Training: Brook Pallas ~ Member of Team CNBR
Speaking: #4863A0 Thinking: #98AFC7
Council Member: Phaedo Katsaros ~ Figurehead for Faunus/Human relations
Speaking: #667C26 Thinking: #B6CC76

Vacuo: ShowHide
40th Vytal Tournament Champion: Zabar Aga ~ Member of Team DAWN
Speaking: #CD7F32 Thinking: #EE9A4D

Vale: ShowHide
Huntress: Malina Nahualli-Roth ~ Leader of Team MCCA
Speaking: #993A64 Thinking: #8B0C44
Beacon Professor: Titania Printemps ~ Assistant Headmistress of Beacon Academy
Speaking: #4AA02C Thinking: #E55B3C
Drop-out: Durian Ghede ~ Former leader of team DFDL
Speaking: #E1BD27 Thinking: #AF8B00

Kingnoname1

  • Full Member

  • Offline
  • ***

  • 1032
  • Karma:
    +75/-1
  • Personal Text
    Here to chat, always.
    • View Profile
Re: Cole Ashton
« Reply #5 on: August 24, 2018, 04:38:09 AM »
Sorry about the wait, issues with some of the wording aside it's a well-done profile. Approved.
No criticism is too harsh so hit me with your best shot.

Calen Shrike - ASTC - First Year Beacon.

Saffron de Cortez - SALT - Third Year Atlas.

Amarant Lovis - (formerly of)ACCE - Headmaster of Atlas Academy

Ramalia - RASB - First Year Shade