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« on: November 20, 2017, 04:14:29 AM »
1) Changed Valentine's parents' occupation to being the owner of an insurance company. I could have probably made it so that the criminals miraculously killed a huntsman and huntress in broad daylight, but that would be really unrealistic, so thank you for noticing that point. The only reason I made the parents be a huntsman and huntress was to give her some incentive to strive to be one as well.
2) Changes reverted to original state.
3) Removed the need to take medication. Frankly I did my research on the spinal cord injury, and I read that random twitching can be an after-effect of such injuries in areas that are affected. It does make more sense that if she completely loses the ability to control her body below her neck she wouldn't be suffering from that however.
4) This has been on my mind ever since I wrote her up. I decided to scrap the idea of having a mental illness, since frankly, I am not confident enough in my ability to do it well enough. I still think it would be interesting and fun, but I should get more experience with roleplaying in general before I attempt something so difficult.
5) I included a short one-liner that says that the government assigned a temporary guardian to her until she is 18. I might expand on this later today, but for now I don't have enough time, so this will suffice.
6) Removed ability to sustain herself through blood. Unfortunate. I wanted to stick with the vampire theme as much as possible. I realise that blood isn't easy to come by, but what I thought was possible is that the government would be able to provide her with blood. Since in RWBY a wide variety of faunus exists, there could be more sanguivorous bat faunuses that inherited the blood drinking trait, so it would make sense that the government would have something in place to provide them with blood. (I should have written this down in the profile actually... xd)
7) Changes made to that part of the profile.
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8a) Blood Clotting: I already specified that it would only work on herself, so I'll just make the part [Bold] where I said it.
8b) Blood Absorbtion: Changes made to that section as suggested. Can I buff the amount of aura restored by Blood Absorbtion by 5%, to a total of 10%?
8c) Blood Marionette: Balancing adjustments made as suggested.
9) Removed the food bit.
Thank you for the review Vision, don't worry about the delay. I'm a lot more patient normally, I just happened to be really bored with everything IRL for the past week, so that is why I might have come accross as impatient. I understand why it took so long to review Valentine, and I appreciate that you guys took the time to review my character in a way that would still allow me to play out the character how I wanted to. I am also completely fine with the changes, so no worries.