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Tieren Augus (Moved to Character Creation)
« on: February 09, 2017, 04:49:16 PM »
CHARACTER

Name: Tieren Augus

Age: 18

Species and Gender: Male Human

Symbol: A blue laurel wreath, with a golden caduceus staff in the middle

Occupation: First Year Beacon student

Appearance: Tieren normally looks as if he's just finished a bodybuilding session, which he pretty much always does. He has brown hair which reaches his neck, with a slight tint of light blue at the ends. He has brown eyes, white skin, slightly tanned, and has several, shallow scars along the bottom of his right arm, which were caused by him testing his weapon. He sometimes wears a armband, high up on his left arm and normally hidden, which contains his symbol. He has broad shoulders and has a semi-obvious 6-pack. When not in school uniform, he wears a denim jacket and ripped trousers, paired with sneakers. In combat, he switches this for a loose blue T-shirt, worn under a light plate of chest armor. Tieren also wears a leather bracer on his right arm, and layered shoulder armor on his left shoulder. Otherwise, he goes unarmored for the rest of his body. Paired with his armor is a ammo belt, which he uses to reload his weapon. However, this is normally left half full, as Tieren doesn't really do range.

History: Tieren Augus was born and grew up in the rough streets of Vacuo, among a older brother, who was part of a Vacuan street gang, his mother, who was soft-spoken and timid, and his father, who, like Tieren, was a brash, stubborn person. Tieren, against his parents's wishes, wanted to join his brother's crew, obviously looking up to his brother as a role model (albeit a bad one). Unfortunately for Tieren, he was dismissed as a "runt" and "puny". This triggered Tieren's hotheadedness, and after hearing this, his father was determined to get Tieren into shape and show the Vacuan gang who was boss. Secretly, however, Tieren's father wanted to wean Tieren off the bad influence his brother had on him.

From the age of 7, Tieren was doing exercises his father specially designed for Tieren, to build up his muscles, strength and endurance at a young age, but careful not to overdo it. Tieren was taught to swim, use treadmills, lift weights, cycle, and stretch vital muscles, and moved on to benchpressing, endurance training, and bodybuilding at the age of 11. He was also taught rudimentary swordplay by a Huntsman, who was impressed by Tieren's determination.
At the age of 16, Tieren returned to the Vacuan gang to find his brother had left long ago, kicked out in a coup by the new leader, one of Tieren's doubters. Tieren challenged each and every member to a brawl, and even the leader, who once scoffed at the scrawny runt, was shocked at the massive change in Tieren. Soon, the leader surrendered in order to save some of the gang's dignity, and offered up an ancient, massive piece of tempered steel as extra compensation. The piece of steel, which took 3 people to carry, Tieren hoisted with ease.

Remembering the time the Huntsman had taught him basic swordplay, he carried the steel to a sword-smith to forge into something he could hold with more ease, while he asked his parents about the path he should take now. Seeing the fire within Tieren, like his father before him, they recommended a path as a Huntsman, where he could put his strength to good use, unlike being in a gang. However, Tieren had had enough of fighting in Vacuo, and instead, after collecting his new-forged blade, packed his belongings and set out for Vale, bringing with him one of his father's prized possessions: A beautiful, blue-and-white shield from the days when his father was spry enough to hunt.

Arriving at Vale, Tieren found out he could not attend Beacon, Shade Academy's counterpart, without first either going through Signal Academy, or passing a entrance test. Recognising that he was too old to join Signal, Tieren could only do the Entrance Test, one of which he was almost guaranteed to fail in: since he had received almost no education, he could not pass the Academic Test. Realising this, Tieren now needed a way to ace the remaining two tests, one of which he needed a weapon for. The way he fought currently was not a way that Tieren particularly liked: massive sword in one hand, shield in the other. This was very unwieldy for Tieren, especially with the massive blade that would have been easier to wield with two hands, or held at another angle. Moreover, everyone seemed to have some sort of gun, putting Tieren at a natural disadvantage, even with his bulk and strength.

By a stroke of luck, Tieren bumped into the Huntsman who first taught him how to use a sword, inside a smithy. Tieren was attempting to figure out how he would use his sword by examining the kinds of weapons everyone else was using. The Huntsman solved all of his problems with one stroke: by combining sword, shield and gun together, he would only need one hand to wield all three, and have his other hand free for anything else. Armed with what Tieren now called his GN Blade, he entered the Entrance Exam. Flunking the Academic Exam and easily acing the Sparring Test, the staff were astonished by Tieren's GN Blade and the way he used it to decimate foes with one hefty swing. With that, Tieren was admitted into Beacon with a stern warning to up his academic results, or he would be kicked out.

Personality: Tieren is hotheaded. Very, very, VERY hotheaded. And with that, comes stubbornness, willfulness, short-lived temper, and a desire to break anyone, or anything, that is in his way. He's the kind of person, who, when given an obstacle that can easily be bypassed, will instead attempt to power through it instead. As such, he has frequent breakups with his friends, but eventually (after a long time and multiple glasses of iced lemon tea) he will see his mistakes. Sometimes.

Beneath this stubborn attitude, however, lies a caring soul ready to lay down most everything to protect the people he cares about, backed up by his strong-headed will. Tieren believes that all people are equal, including Faunus, and thus whenever he sees any sign of Faunus inequality, he is not remotely afraid of speaking his mind. (For speaking, read shouting...maybe yelling).

With all that strong will, Tieren is not the best at returning insults, retorts or exchanging words in general. He gets very angry if people start saying things he cannot return, and that's when he brings out his catchphrase "Actions speak louder than words. Especially if they have a fist to their face."
One certain way to calm Tieren down is by giving him his favourite drink, iced lemon tea. This almost guarantees that Tieren returns to a semi-neutral state, but he isn't bribed by others, just his friends.

Aura and Semblance: Tieren's Aura color, surprisingly, is a calm, cool indigo blue, especially considering Tieren's hotheadedness. Tieren's aura is much better at deflecting blows than actually healing wounds, or any other Aura ability, for that matter. He has an average amount of aura.

Tieren can sometimes get well and properly pissed. When that happens, part of his semblance kicks in, which is reflected in his Aura color: the angrier Tieren gets, the darker his Aura goes, ending in a dark navy blue. In this state, his Aura becomes significantly stronger at deflecting attacks, but significantly weaker at everything else. This allows Tieren to shrug off attacks he would normally feel if not angry, but he feels the full impact when he calms down.

When in battle, one can get distracted and lose focus while angry, involuntarily calming them down. There is also the factor of fear, sorrow, panic--all the things that affect a Huntsman. What does Tieren do? Use the second part of his semblance--Mood Matrix. This unique semblance allows Tieren to change his mood, and subsequently his temper, at will. A passive semblance for most, but a big power boost to Tieren, thanks to his Aura shifting powers when his temper flares. When needed, Tieren can shift his mood and rage to maximum output, causing a temporary power spike in his Aura deflection levels, but also a decrease in any other abilities. This semblance is not limited to making Tieren angry, however. In times of need, Tieren can also change his mood to near tranquility, even on a hectic battlefield. Doing so helps him focus on a certain target, or brings him under control. Due to this being a passive semblance, Tieren can change his mood once every 15 or so seconds, but he prefers not to use it if he isn't in a combat situation, as it drains his Aura significantly if not used in combat.

Combat Behavior: Tieren is the definition of front-line fighter. In battle, you will never see him in the back lines, or anywhere else, but the front, up close and in the enemy's face. His GN Blade provides him with an ideal weapon to be brawling with, while his Semblance allows him to shrug off enemy attacks for a extended duration of time, putting massive pressure on Tieren's opponent. This, however, has several obvious weaknesses: Tieren cannot fight those which he cannot reach. Thus, any long-range firearm will counter Tieren's fighting style, as the GN Blade's Range form is rarely used by Tieren; instead, he prefers to chase them down rather than shoot. Due to the GN Blade's absurdly long reach, any rapiers or even lances will struggle to outrange the GN Blade.

WEAPON

Name: GN Blade

Primary Form: Tieren's GN Blade really should be called something else than just a "blade", but Tieren couldn't be bothered. In reality, it's a small, semi-automatic Dust pistol, attached to a small, blue and white, diamond-shaped, elongated shield extending to around Tieren's shoulder. Oh, and a massive, tempered-steel buster sword, folded on the bottom of the whole device on a hinge, and a medium sheathing device. The whole blade is just about shorter than Tieren's arm. The GN Blade's primary form, or the Range form, consists of Tieren just using the Dust pistol like any pistol. This form is rarely used as Tieren just loves the up-and-close method of fighting.
The Dust pistol fires 9mm caliber bullets, and only uses Dust as a way to fire the bullets. The rounds themselves do not benefit from any kind of Dust. These bullets have a effective range of 45 meters.

Secondary Form: This is where the GN Blade spends most of it's time in. In the GN Blade's Blade form, the buster sword unhinges from beneath the GN Blade's sheath, swinging upwards via a spring mechanism, and locks in place pointing forward, the base of the blade in front of the pistol and locked in place via a self-locking mechanism. Fully extended, the entire sword is as long as Tieren's arm, giving him an absurd reach. In this mode, the GN Blade gains massive slicing power, as it was designed for that purpose. When the GN Blade is being transformed, the unhinging motion alone is enough to cut a tree in half. The entire blade is a dull grey color, with hints of white.
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History: Tieren wanted a weapon with massive power up close, yet didn't want to be swinging a mace or morningstar around. He also didn't want to burden himself with holding a shield with one hand and a sword in the other, let alone carry a gun. The end result was a mix of all three, emphasizing the destructive capability of the GN Blade and Tieren's love of close combat. The prototype GN Blade left numerous scars on Tieren's wielding arm from the folded blade, thus the reason why Tieren now wears a bracer.
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Re: Tieren Auguste
« Reply #1 on: February 09, 2017, 04:51:13 PM »
And I'm back here again.

Alright, third character this time, something I'm more comfortable creating. However, I would still value the communities's opinions and criticism, so please, feel free to fire off any questions you have. More will be added on Tieren as I think of it.
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Re: Tieren Auguste
« Reply #2 on: February 09, 2017, 06:03:06 PM »

Aura and Semblance: Tieren's Aura color, surprisingly, is a calm, cool indigo blue, especially considering Tieren's hotheadedness. This, however, is reflected in his Aura color: the angrier Tieren gets, the darker his Aura goes, ending in a dark navy blue. When Tieren is properly pissed (which is pretty often), his Aura becomes significantly stronger at deflecting attacks, but significantly weaker at everything else. This allows Tieren to shrug off attacks he would normally feel if not angry, but he feels the full impact when he calms down.

This sounds like it should be part of his semblance because aura can't do that, it only regenerates wounds and protects the person. I don't know if you wanted it to be part of the semblance or the aura itself but please clarify. If, by any chance it was intended to be a part of his Aura then that is a no-go so it would be best if you said that its a part of his semblance or something. :)

Please structure your text into paragraphs too as its a little bit hard on the eyes. Sorry if I misunderstood what  you wrote, its really late here. That's about it, I like the concept though. :)
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Re: Tieren Auguste
« Reply #3 on: February 09, 2017, 06:12:58 PM »
Huh. Didn't really think of that. Thanks for reminding me. Also, sorry for the big chunky passages, I get carried away sometimes :P
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Re: Tieren Auguste
« Reply #4 on: February 09, 2017, 06:17:42 PM »
I can relate haha. xD

Also no probs.
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