[Vitalis597]

CHARACTER

Name: Ember Riochu

Age: 18

Species and Gender: Human Female

Occupation: Huntress in Training, Beacon Academy.

Appearance: Ember is a young woman in her late teens, though at a glace, one would generally assume she is older, given her rather curvaceous figure, something which she clearly makes no attempts to hide, wearing a tight, form-fitting red and black dress, one that covers her modesty, but leaves little to the imagination, covering her legs and back fully, but leaving her shoulders down completely bare. Her hair is a dark crimson, matched by her red eyes and equally as red lips, the only make-up she ever bothers to wear.

History: Ember grew up in Vale, a child raised in a Hunters Family, and as such, grew up around other Huntsmen children. Over time, the young, impressionable girl grew to idolise these great men and women, wanting to grow up to be just like them. Her parents begrudgingly allowed her to do so, giving her the training that she asked for. It was not pleasant to say the least. They were brutal, relentless, and almost abusive in the methodical routine Ember was put through. But the young girl endured it all with a smile. After a few months of training, one of her friends, another Hunters child, decided to join her, having also wanted to follow in his parents footsteps.

Over time, through both their parents training and their time at Signal, the two finally managed to get a position at Beacon and, having heard stories about past initiations from their parents, devised a way to 'cheat' to ensure they were on the same team. During her second year at Signal, Ember discovered her Semblance, which she would later use to great effect for many different things be they pranks, or more serious Huntress tasks.

Personality: Ember is somewhat a prankster, something her Semblance assists with a great deal. She is mischievous, shameless, and a massive flirt once she feels comfortable around someone, which is almost always instantly, provided her partner gets along with them also. Under stress, however, she is as serious as they come, and as focused as a laser. Stubborn and unrelenting, she always achieves her goal, no matter the cost.

Aura and Semblance: Ember's Aura manifests as a pale purple glow, while use of her semblance causes the sclera of her eyes to turn a pale purple. Her Semblance itself, however, she calls "Farseer", an apt name as it allows her to see across great distances, provided she can properly picture the place, or the person she wishes to see, in question. This does, however, come with the loss of vision from one eye for the duration.

Combat Behavior:  In combat, Ember prefers to stay a great distance away from the fight itself, taking on the role of a sniper, picking off opponents and making tactical decisions for her team.

WEAPON

Name: Far Cutter

Primary Form: In it's primary form, Far Cutter is a High Impact Sniper, capable of firing a verity of Dust and regular ammunition to great effect.

Secondary Form: With Far Cutter's secondary form, it becomes a spear, allowing her to keep her distance, even in close quarters

Dust Functions: Far Cutter can be loaded with most any type of Dust, however Ember will primarily use Fire, which ignites soft targets on impact, Gravity, which has more stopping power, and Ice Dust, which can freeze over the impact area.

History: Far Cutter was the Weapon that Ember Built in her third year, after learning how to use her Semblance. Since she can, with the use of her Semblance, see much further than any normal Human or Faunus, she makes a great Sniper, and so Far Cutter came into existence.

It was not without it's flaws, naturally. The original concept included laser guided bullets to better pull off those almost impossible shots, and the ability to Mechashift into a more rapid design, but at her partners suggestion, she relented and left Far Cutter as a simple Bolt Action Sniper Rifle.

[Kingnoname1]

Usually I wouldn't comment this early on but I think it might help with the stuff you have in character creation proper. To that end I'll do both Ember and Aqua here because they have much the same issues.

The main issue is detail but there are a few specifics I want to mention later. Using RWBY characters Ember is basically Yang but inconsistent and without anything which makes her interesting, Aqua is basically Ren with the same although mostly consistent, and Imber is a blander qrow. You have left their personalities very one dimensional and this issue pervades all the characters I've seen from you. Give them some hobbies give, some quirks, explain why they are the way they are rather than leaving it as is and simple make them more memorable than simple character archetypes. I'm aware some people like to play characters like this but these profiles are basically your C.V when applying for teams or threads so you want to make a good first impression. This issue continues with the other sections like appearance; How do they hold themselves? What do they sound like? Do they wear something different when expecting trouble? How often do the students wear school uniform? etc etc. Same with history and combat behaviour.

I'll be happy to answer specifics but I really do think they all could use some more time brainstorming before you look to us for balancing and what not.

[Vitalis597]

I don't exactly see how these characters resemble those canon characters in any way. Sure, Ember is well endowed and a flirt. But there ends her similarities to Yang. You could relate her to Coco by that alone, too. She is a level headed tactician who prefers long ranged engagements, in contrast to Yang, who rushes in with "Punch it till it dies" as her best plan. Aqua is observant and calm, preferring to stick to his own small circle, which is the extent of his similarities to Ren. You could also say he's a male version of Blake, or Pyrrha. As for Imber, I will admit, I did base his attire around Qrow's, but (aside from losing loved ones and enjoying a stiff drink) that again is the extent of their similarities.

As per them being two dimensional, on their sheets, yes. I generally prefer to leave them that way. That, however, is purely because I much prefer to show, not tell. In a roleplay, all of those things you are asking for will be seen. If I were to put down ever nuance of a character, what would there be to explore in a Roleplay?

Not to mention, unless you wish for me to add several sections to the Template, there isn't really any place for me to add the things you're asking for without making it a cluttered mess.

[Kingnoname1]

Except Ember is only well endowed and a flirt, oh and she gets serious in combat I wonder who else does that. Sure they fight differently but that doesn't change who they are. Same thing with Aqua he is only reserved so it doesn't matter if that is the only similarity it's all Aqua has. Moving all the way around to Imber again all he is, it the basic brooding anti-hero making him a poor mans Qrow.

You can make the same 'what would there be to explore in role play?' argument with having a personality section at all. I'm not asking you to put down everything that ever happened to them or every facet of their personality but surely there is more to these characters than what you have shown here. Trust is earned and we haven't seen you role play so we are going to apply the same standards to you as we do everyone else.

And no they aren't additional sections. How some one stands and talks and wears is apart of their appearance and as such fit in that section.