Author Topic: Siu Ceong  (Read 917 times)

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Re: Siu Ceong
« Reply #15 on: August 30, 2018, 12:16:04 AM »
"The Cranes starts without armament and must take some time to be charged with dust, and some more when she rearm and/or refuels, which are needed after 2 attack runs."
Done, at the start of paragraph 3. Also,
"The Cranes feed footages from themselves to the mind of Siu similar to a CCTV."
Added back the recon ability, at the end of paragraph 1.
Catalina Glenn - first year Beacon Academy student - "Not funny, dude! And not dudes... and everyone else... " - Cata, Cat.
Infrared Ray - fourth year Atlas Academy student - "So it's __ and __(insert name here) meets each other."
Sheer Gold - second year Beacon Academy student - "This is super effective!"
Siu Ceong - Beacon Academy graduate Huntress - "What is this? Where can I learn about it?"

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Re: Siu Ceong
« Reply #16 on: October 25, 2018, 10:30:43 AM »
According to discussion logs in Discord:

The Dragon is thrown to the recycle bin.
The grenade sized missile is removed.
Gave a direct comparison to the gun.
Edit: Given that the Cranes are being relegated to scouting functions, she would no longer have the personal combat prowess to stage in the Vytal festival Tournament and I resign from the Tournament on her behalf.
Edit2: Rewrite of relevant history will come if/when current edits are greenlighted.
Edit3: Semblance in the main post changed. Inapplicable pieces in history removed.
« Last Edit: October 26, 2018, 04:50:29 AM by Siuwa »
Catalina Glenn - first year Beacon Academy student - "Not funny, dude! And not dudes... and everyone else... " - Cata, Cat.
Infrared Ray - fourth year Atlas Academy student - "So it's __ and __(insert name here) meets each other."
Sheer Gold - second year Beacon Academy student - "This is super effective!"
Siu Ceong - Beacon Academy graduate Huntress - "What is this? Where can I learn about it?"

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Re: Siu Ceong
« Reply #17 on: November 01, 2018, 07:20:53 AM »
Semblance changed again.
Catalina Glenn - first year Beacon Academy student - "Not funny, dude! And not dudes... and everyone else... " - Cata, Cat.
Infrared Ray - fourth year Atlas Academy student - "So it's __ and __(insert name here) meets each other."
Sheer Gold - second year Beacon Academy student - "This is super effective!"
Siu Ceong - Beacon Academy graduate Huntress - "What is this? Where can I learn about it?"

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Re: Siu Ceong
« Reply #18 on: November 30, 2018, 02:02:15 PM »
edits approved.
No criticism is too harsh so hit me with your best shot.

Calen Shrike - ASTC - First Year Beacon.

Saffron de Cortez - SALT - Third Year Atlas.

Amarant Lovis - (formerly of)ACCE - Headmaster of Atlas Academy

Ramalia - RASB - First Year Shade