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Jade Lescour
« on: November 08, 2018, 11:24:53 PM »
Been a while since I've made a character, and since I haven't made a darker character yet I would love some input on making sure her story is interesting rather than full edge cringe.

CHARACTER

Name: Jade Lescour

Age: 17 (3rd of Frost, 63 AC)

Species and Gender: Cat faunus, female

Symbol: Styalised design of her Dust wheel

Occupation: 1st Year Atlas Student

Appearance: A glance at Jade would show a young woman who is almost the perfect example of Atlesian high society. Whilst her height is fairly average (5í4Ē) she still stands tall, wearing heels most of the time and maintaining perfect posture. Her regular attire is heavily inspired by the uniforms of the atlas specialists, a long white coat with blue accents and tall boots. On her back there is a unique piece of jewelry, a silver disk with elegant engravings across the metal and different coloured gemstones embedded in a circle. She has bright blue eyes, some minor touches of makeup, and shoulder-length ashen hair usually kept in a braided bun.

She gets very close to the social ideal but unfortunately cannot achieve it due to two fairly large cat ears on the top of her head. The right of these ears has a large scar at its base, giving the impression that someone had tried to cut it off but stopped halfway.

History: Before the war Lescour developments was a fairly small realtor focusing on housing students, staff and graduates from the Alsius combat school. However as Alsius grew into what we now know as Atlas, Lescour developments was ideally situated to capitalize on the migration from Mantle to Atlas leading to significant growth. The company is now among the largest real estate agencies on Solitas. Like other traditional Atlesian companies the top level management was passed down through the family.

The current CEO is Duncan Lescour, a workaholic who had managed to maintain growth even after all these years. Though it was unlikely to happen for a while there was no doubt that the next CEO would be one of his three daughters. The firstborn was Laura, as she was five years older than the twins she was most likely to take over the company and she was trained for it nearly from birth. Duncan was a very private man when it came it his relationships so little is know about the woman was Laura's mother, other than that she left Atlas only a year after the birth.

The next love of Duncan would have been quite controversial had the story ever reached public ears, as it was one of the houses faunus maids, Stella. Again the details are sparse however for the few that knew of their relationship it was clear that Stella and Duncan had utterly fallen for each other despite their different backgrounds. Stella was also apparently gravely ill at the time and Duncan would end up spending a small fortune to give her the best treatment available. While she never got healthy her condition improved and she lived for almost another decade. During that time the two would end up having children, twin girls, that Stella got to spend 6 years with before her illness caught up with her.

The twin girls were Jasmine and Jade. Before she had passed their mother had told them that while there was nothing wrong with being a faunus, their lives might be easier if they were willing to hide their nature from time to time. This was easier for Jasmine as her trait was feline eyes, so she simply ended up wearing contacts every day. Jade had it rougher, she had inherited her mother's ears, to hide them she wore some awful hats or a rather painful tiara that kept her ears folded to down and covered with hair. For the twins it was simply a game of who could hide it the best and in return they got to live like princesses. Together with Laura, the twins had private lessons in dancing, etiquette, painting, among many other subjects that an heiress should know. Despite having different mothers the three sisters became inseparable.

However, as they continued to grow up Jade's ears became harder and harder to hide, and when she was 12 years old her father told her that It simply wouldnít be possible for her to attend the dinner parties he would hold for investors. While that would have been a blessing for most children her age it tore at Jadeís heart. Not that the dinners were all that fun mind you, but it had been drilled into them how important they were and besides the sisters would often perform some dance or play some music which Jade had loved. While Jasmine was a ball of energy Jade had always done whatever was required to be the perfect daughter, now would be no exception. A few weeks later when she was sure everyone was fast asleep, she brought a first aid kit and a knife to her bedroom. Just two quick cuts, some bandages and tomorrow she would be the perfect daughter again. It didnít work out like that. Her screams of pain woke everyone in the house before she fainted.

By the time she was starting to wake up at the hospital her ear had already been sewn back on since she had gotten treatment so quick there wasnít going to be any permanent damage, other than a scar. As she opened her eyes she was greeted to the sight of her sisters and her father. Still a bit dazed she didnít catch everything they were saying however the gist was her father was telling her that if she wanted her hair cut then she just had to say so. Whilst he had stayed for a few hours her father eventually had to get back to work, but her sisters stayed all day. Within the week she was back at the manor.

While things quickly went back to normal for Jasmine and Duncan, both Jade and Laura were acting differently. Jade seemed to be in a good mood when she was out and about but she hid in her room quite often, and Laura had started to ignore some of her classes and always had a solemn expression when around Jade, she clearly had something on her mind but she just couldnít find the right time to bring it up. The time would end up being after she noticed some minor cuts on Jadeís arm that she didnít have a satisfactory explanation for. That night Laura went to Jadeís room to talk with her and she wouldnít accept no for an answer, and while Jade was initially quite resistant she did slowly start to open up. Laura told her that she was the one to get to her first and she knew what she had tried to do, but had told the others that it seemed like a haircutting accident. They talked about her recent behavior, hiding away, her mood, the cuts, and for the first time in years they talked about her being a faunus. That currently in Atlas she would have fewer options, but that her ears were a part of her, they were beautiful and a reminder of their mother.

Jade had struggled with the fact that the life she had raised to for wasnít going to happen. While she could certainly still live a life of luxury with the family, only one of them was going to take over after all, however she wanted to be of use to the family. So for the next couple of months she did something she hadnít really done before, she tried to see how other faunus lived in Atlas, in order to find a respectable role she could still fulfill. Eventually the answer came to her, an Atlas Specialist. They seemed to be universally respected and she had seen a few faunus among them. While her father was initially reluctant to have her follow such a dangerous career path he would eventually relent He hired the best trainers he could find to come to train her and stocked up on weapons of all kinds. It quickly became clear that she was a natural with Dust, and once her semblance backed that up she decided to forgo conventional weapons in order to stand out.

Personality: A lot of children who grow up with negligent or distant parents end up rebelling against them, Jade however reacted differently. With her mother passed on and her faunus nature preventing her from being close to her father she ended up doubling down on obedience. Going out of her way to do anything and everything to help him, even it if meant hiding from most of the guests to their home. Whilst she would claim that her relationship with her father is as good as possible given her nature, there's no denying that it does put a strain on her and it has, at least in part, led to some depressive periods.

As most dinner guests were unlikely to visit the library it was one of the few places Jade could hide without much concern as such she is fairly well read which when combined with her newfound ambition has allowed her to do quite well in both her practical and theoretical subjects. As an individual Jade is incredibly determined, always a thought on her goal of becoming a specialist. While she can be stubborn and is certainly strong-willed she can often default to a meek obedience, though that's not to be confused with her being shy. If she feels a trust or loyalty to the people on her team she will put their needs above her own.

Aura and Semblance: Her aura is, unsurprisingly, a Jade colour.

A Dust control semblance: She can pull Dust from the pack on her back, activate it and launch it towards an enemy. While she can attack from a fair range using this technique there is an important detail to make clear, she only has control of the Dust while it's inside her aura, once fired out it moves as a projectile depending on how she launched it. Meaning her attacks won't follow opponents and she canít use other peoples Dust against themselves. Through careful control of how she launches the Dust, she can create some very simple structures, pillars, walls, a bridge for example. While she can create a simple weapon it's considerably more difficult as she needs to get the proper proportions and balance on a small scale so it takes a good 5-10 seconds, and it ties up one of her hands to maintain it so it limits her ranged effectiveness.

Combat Behavior: WiP
She carries no weapons and makes all her attacks using the Dust stored on her back which she carries a plentiful amount of and her semblance that has little fatigue drain. In order to deliver Dust at range in a more complex pattern to create simple shapes, she has utilized her background in dance. Unless she has taken the time to prepare a melee weapon she struggles as enemies get close, however even without it she is not defenseless in melee combat but she then runs the risk of damaging herself whilst attacking an opponent. She brings extreme elemental versatility to a fight, but any opponents that could stop her Dust or knock it off course could make her useless for the fight. As she uses raw dust rather than launching it from a fire arm her attacks do have a bit of travel time and as such she will struggle with very agile opponents at range, though there is always the option of simply adding more dust to the attack for a bigger boom.

WEAPON

Name: Sample Text

Primary Form: Dust wheel
Designed to ensure that it is extremely unlikely that any attack could activate the Dust while stored even if her aura drops
Something like the images below
https://i.pinimg.com/originals/8a/e9/b9/8ae9b947e7eba4bfae5be7db8a59f7ab.png
https://orig00.deviantart.net/6289/f/2018/212/f/c/new_Dust_index_by_capricornguy-dcit2n9.png

Dust Functions: The pack itself is nothing more than a storage container she uses via her semblance

History: Sample Text
« Last Edit: November 09, 2018, 09:03:46 PM by Vision »

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Re: Jade Lescour
« Reply #1 on: November 10, 2018, 12:19:52 AM »
Obviously, you are still working on this so if I suggest something you were going to do anyway or do something else to eliminate it's necessity apologies

I know you were worried about it coming across as edgy and I don't think it does. However, I do feel the incident should be at least touched on with the personality perhaps in regards to Jade's obedience to her father being more than simply following orders and rather simply already doing whatever he would request. Usually, she correctly reads this like leaving the room when a dignitary comes in, answering his questions quickly and so on. But obviously, she has a tendency to read too much into these requests which personally I think is a very powerful place to build a genuinely dark character.

But I do like the core idea of this and am interesting in seeing what you do with it.
No criticism is too harsh so hit me with your best shot.

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Re: Jade Lescour
« Reply #2 on: November 10, 2018, 08:33:47 AM »
An excellent point that I 100% agree with. I Haven't added it in as of yet and probably won't have time this weekend but will do for sure. The sections after history are very much lacking polish but should at least give an impression of what I'm going for.

Thanks again King!

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