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Bordeaux Page Alderson
« on: March 15, 2019, 09:37:48 PM »
CHARACTER

Name: Bordeaux Page Alderson

Age: 17

Species and Gender: Male, Human

Symbol: A red crystal symbol with a red teardrop within.



Occupation: Beacon Student, (Former) Unpaid Medical Intern/Nurse

Height: 5 feet 6 inches

Weight: 135 pounds

Appearance: Despite being male, Bordeaux looks very feminine, though he embraces it, surprisingly.

He has pale clear skin that seems to shine naturally, and sky blue eyes that glimmer in the light. He has a heart-shaped face, with a button nose, and lips that are on the fence for thin, and full, usually in a straight line. He still has a bit of baby fat in his cheeks, so it seems soft and a bit cuddly, and he has shoulder-length wavy light blue hair, soft and silky and usually a tiny bit tangled.

Bordeaux wears dressy casual clothing. Khaki pants, a denim or flannel vest over a collared red shirt, and black loafers. He prefers dark colors as opposed to light, since using his Semblance will often stain his clothes, and he'd rather hide the stains whenever he can.

Bordeaux is more of a support-type fighter, and mostly hangs back from the frontlines. Despite this, he stays physically fit, and is rather slim, with a mostly lithe frame, the only exception being his perky butt. (No regrets.)



History: Born in Vale to a first responder and a retired Huntress turned nurse practitioner, Bordeaux was the child of two of Vale's medical practitioners, and after some time, it showed. His parents taught him everything they knew on their profession. Sanguine knew how to patch a wound, what to do to stem a bullet wound, how to create a makeshift splint out of a few sticks and a ribbon. Every basic to advanced medical technique his parents knew, they taught Bordeaux. They hoped that it would inspire him, push him to go for a career that would save others.

And he did pick such a career.

Just not the one they expected.

Instead of a medical career, like the path they hoped he would choose, Bordeaux instead pushed to become a Hunter. Despite his parents' protests, he claimed that it would save lives the way both he and they wanted to. He pushed that he would help wounded Hunters to survive the Grimm, and if all else failed, he could always just retire like his mother. Finally giving in to his reasons, the two signed him up for Signal Academy, where he trained for three years to be a Huntsman while keeping his own medical skills sharp and ready.

His mother having previously unlocked his Aura a few days before he began studying to fight the Grimm, Bordeaux entered Signal Academy armed with a plethora of medical knowledge that eventually leaked into his own fighting style. His combat skills were...honestly not that great, however, he excelled in classes on medical skills, and was acknowledged as one of the best students in the course.

In his third year at Signal, Bordeaux forged his weapon, a whip that doubled as a garrote, and could shift into a rifle similar to that of the real world M1 Garand. With recommendations from his teachers due to his exceptional medical skills, Sanguine applied for Beacon, enrolled a month being having applied. In addition to that, He began usingvarious Dust canisters to alter the battlefield to his advantage. With a push of his Aura, he could create a wildfire, freeze the ground over, create gravity fields that disoriented an enemy, and more.

Before he actually began attending Beacon, however, he got a job (more of a volunteer position, but it was officially registered as a job,) as an unpaid medical intern in the Vale General Hospital, helping with patients in the ER, and occasionally tending to those in the ICU after a while. Officially, his position was as an orderly/comunity care assistant, though his parents would claim it was more like an unpaid internship. Because of this, his social skills are far better than they used to be, and he seems to have gained quite a bit of experience from his time in the hospital, as well as having raised his reaction time a bit. As such, he has more experience dealing with wounds and emergency situations, and can patch up a moderately bad wound quickly due to muscle memory and him basically knowing what to do and when to do it. Training in first response situations and such while he was in the hospital has given his more in-depth knowledge on how to react, and he's capable of dealing with relatively minor emergency situations. He knows how to make a rudimentary splint with wood, gauze, and bandages when he had to treat a broken bone while in Vale on a day off, how to identify some major health problems by just looking (which could be further analyzed via a more thorough examination. No, not that kind of examination, you perv, just the regular one with various tests to see if somrthing is wrong and such), and from quite a few codes during his shifts, how to do CPR. The less said about those shifts, the better. Unfortunately, he quit his job when he had to go to Beacon, but whenever he has time, he visits the hospital and volunteers there.

Personality: Bordeaux is, first and foremost, loyal. He believes that it doesn't if they're your family or not, if they bully you, manipulate you, try to abuse you for their own personal gains, you should NOT associate yourself with them. He believes in the motto "The blood of the covenant is thicker than the water of the womb", and will often encourage his friends to stand for themselves. He is a bit socially awkward, but generally extroverted and very friendly. However, he's also prideful and a bit of a narcissist, and likes when people compliment his looks. He's also impulsive, and will charge into a situation if he felt that his friends were in danger of any kind.

Aura and Semblance: Bordeaux's aura is maroon red, and is above average, capable of healing moderate to slightly severe wounds, with a tiny bit of help keeping the wounds closed, and acting as a semi-strong barrier against oncoming attacks.

His Semblance is Blood Bond. With it, Bordeaux can use his own blood, Blood Type O and free of any diseases, by the way to temporarily heal another person's wounds and act as a sort of band-aid, possibly prolonging their lives for a while so help can arrive and save them. The lost blood regenerates at a minute per cup of blood used, and his limit is 1.5 pints of blood, so  maximum three minutes need to replenish his lost blood. In addition to this, every time his blood replenished, it purified itself to remove any pathogens or other possibilities of infection.

The downside is that seeing as he's, you know, using his own blood to heal others, it'll leave him extremely weak and possibly anemic for the time he needs to replenish his own blood. He'll essentially be a sitting duck with a sign that says "Free meal here!" in a fight. Also, there's no guarantee the transfusion will work, depending on how severe the wound is. The transfusion only occurs for those that Bordeaux considers an ally, so enemies will not be healed should they be wounded.

Combat Behavior: Bordeaux is a support-type fighter, his Semblance not suited for combat. He's more the team medic, though he is more than capable of holding his own against enemies. Despite this, he's not good with hand-to-hand combat, and would lose in a fist fight. He also fights via medical knowledge, using knowledge of weak areas and pressure points in a pinch. However, this makes him somewhat predictable, and a more attentive opponent can eventually turn his own tactics against him.

WEAPON

Name: Flourish

Primary Form: A 9 foot long red whip with a rifle stock for a hilt. It's mainly used to keep enemies away from him, or occasionally disarm them. However, he can also use the whip to throw people off via wrapping it around their limbs and pulling, or using the whip like a garrote if he's in a pinch.

Secondary Form: A rifle similar to the real-life M1 Garand. The rifle stock folds in, the whip immediately straightens out and stiffens, a loading chamber is revealed near the stock, and the whip retracts to reduce a significant part of the length. The tip opens up to reveal a rifle barrel about 2 feet long

Dust Functions: Outside of firing Fire Dust rifle rounds, it has no Dust functions whatsoever.

History: The weapon Bordeaux built in his third year of Signal. Over the course of a year, Flourish has been enhanced and repaired over and over until perfected by Sanguine. It can store up to twenty Dust rounds per magazine

WEAPON

Name: Dust Array v 1.3, or 'Blight'

Primary Form: A belt of various filled canisters of Dust, ranging from Fire to Energy to Gravity. Each canister is a one-use item and must be refilled upon usage, and each canister has a different effect depending on what Dust remains inside.

Secondary Form: None

Dust Functions: 'Blight' functions wholly on the types of Dust are currently stored within the five canisters. Each canister can only contain one type of Dust, and effects vary. Bordeaux favors Fire, Lightning, Ice, Gravity, and Steam Dust. however.

History: A secondary weapon made from a simple leather belt with five leather bands to hold the canisters, the five canisters themselves, and whatever Dust Bordeaux had on him. Initially called Dust Array v1.3, due to what Bordeaux was still trying to enhance, he eventually just named it 'Blight', deeming the previous name to be a bothersome mouthful.

(As per Monty Oum's color rule, bordeaux is a french for maroon, and maroon is a shade of red. RIP, Monty Oum.))
« Last Edit: April 13, 2019, 03:45:53 PM by Golden Koi »
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Re: Bordeaux Page Alderson
« Reply #1 on: March 17, 2019, 05:54:44 AM »
Sure why not and another trap. +1.
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Re: Bordeaux Page Alderson
« Reply #2 on: March 18, 2019, 06:43:39 PM »
Well, I guess it's about time I come back into reviewing characters. Overall, everything seems fine, but there is only one minor thing that is bugging me.

In regards to his weapon: It says that the whip is 9-ft in length, but then can straighten out to be the barrel of his gun. Are you saying then that his gun is over 9 feet in length? If that is the case, then how would he wield that? I would suggest you explain this part better.

That's about all I can see in regards to this character. Well done.
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Re: Bordeaux Page Alderson
« Reply #3 on: March 19, 2019, 04:20:04 PM »
I mean that the whip is 9 feet long, hilt included. Without the hilt/handle, the barrel is around 8 feet, but compensated via a weight in the handle which balances the fun out.
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Re: Bordeaux Page Alderson
« Reply #4 on: March 19, 2019, 04:23:10 PM »
But yeah, I looked it over and it didn't make sense. Corrected it.
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Re: Bordeaux Page Alderson
« Reply #5 on: March 21, 2019, 01:12:23 AM »
Works for me. Approved 2 of 2 and moved. Happy RPing!
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Re: Bordeaux Page Alderson
« Reply #6 on: March 27, 2019, 04:21:41 PM »
-1, De-approved.

Best Minion will be by to explain, because this isn't so bad a Voxreview is necessary, and I don't like to bare my teeth without the promise of blood.

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Re: Bordeaux Page Alderson
« Reply #7 on: March 27, 2019, 07:29:02 PM »
If this is about the typos, I noticed them a bit too late. Thanks for giving me the chance to correct them.
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Re: Bordeaux Page Alderson
« Reply #8 on: March 28, 2019, 08:36:54 AM »
Last request from staff is clarifying how his basic medical skills in bandaging up wounds has improved from time in the hospital.
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Re: Bordeaux Page Alderson
« Reply #9 on: April 02, 2019, 05:14:10 PM »
Done. Lemme know if I need to change anything else
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Re: Bordeaux Page Alderson
« Reply #10 on: April 13, 2019, 03:15:17 PM »
Man, I missed typing directly into the text box. Thanks Vox!

Okay! Beyond the fixes already discussed on Discord, there's just a few tweaks left to be made before Bordeaux can get reapproved:

1. Bordaeux is more of an orderly than a intern, and since being a medical intern implies a much more involved role at the hospital, that language should be tweaked. Also like, is this entirely a volunteer position, or is Bordaeux actually getting payed?

2. Most of the medical treatment techniques that he's learned are fine, but the lightning dust defibrillator is a bit much, considering it's a very precise tool and mishandling it could easily go wrong. In the similar vein is that cauterizing a wound is usually a procedure used in very extreme scenarios where proper medical supplies are completely unavailable, and reaching the point where a orderly would need to cauterize a wound with fire dust in a professional medical environment isn't reasonable - I doubt the medical staff would resort to having him do that, as well.
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Re: Bordeaux Page Alderson
« Reply #11 on: April 13, 2019, 03:22:55 PM »
Its entirely a volunteer possition. Bordeaux isnt being paid for anything. The reason why I said hes an intern instead of an orderly is that orderlies get paid. It's an actual job, and what Bordeaux has is an unpaid medical internship that's different. It's not a residency, and Hws not an official orderly, so...
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« Reply #12 on: April 19, 2019, 10:56:49 AM »
Alright, this isn't getting through to you. So now Vox gets to step in directly.

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Before he actually began attending Beacon, however, he got a job (more of a volunteer position, but it was officially registered as a job,) as an unpaid medical intern in the Vale General Hospital,



This is the sticking point. "intern" in the field of medicine in most countries has a specific meaning, that being someone who has passed medical school but isn't yet allowed to practice unsupervised.

The reason why I said hes an intern instead of an orderly is that orderlies get paid. It's an actual job, and what Bordeaux has is an unpaid medical internship that's different.



Medical internship is an actual thing with actual definition. That's what you're not getting, and that's why Bordeaux is still denied.

... Also...

and Hws not an official orderly, so...

And from the profile...

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Officially, his position was as an orderly/comunity care assistant




So since this is getting so hard for you to wrap your head around, and a lot of time is being wasted, here's an ultimatum. You have two options.

  • Drop the hospital nonsense, since whether through plan or ignorance you keep trying to Doogie Howser this shit into "he iz am doktor" territory.
  • Up dickhead's age and give him some actual medical training with those extra years.

Those are the two. Those are your options.

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Re: Bordeaux Page Alderson
« Reply #13 on: April 19, 2019, 12:22:36 PM »
If I get rid of all the hospital stuff, which is supposed to be the basis of most of his medical experience and what makes him a competent combat medic, you got any good alternative to that? Because outside of practicing on training dummies, dealing with injuries in a clinic or some place similar, or self-experimentation/mutilation, I got nothing.

And if I up his age, is there a minimum age I need, like 18 or 19? And would him being a part-time orderly work as well?
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