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Avali Glass
« on: September 28, 2016, 10:43:39 PM »
CHARACTER

Name: Avali Glass

Age: 18

Species and Gender: Female, Bird Faunus(Exact species unknown)

Symbol: An outline of a light teal, five-pointed star.

Occupation: Newly enrolled Beacon student, formerly a Signal student.

Appearance: Avali's Faunus trait is a pair of cream-colored wings with pale teal on the tips of the feathers. She doesn't know how to fly, although she often tries, but she can manage something resembling gliding. Her hair follows a similar coloration, being blonde with faded cyan on the ends. It reaches a few inches below her shoulders and usually looks like she's done a poor job of brushing it. Her eyes are a light violet color. She can commonly be seen in the typical Beacon uniform, with leather gloves, an arm guard on her right arm, and a quiver on her back, although in a casual situation, she dresses in blue jeans, a random shirt, and a black sweater that's a size too big for her. At night, she takes the arm guard off and changes into some seriously fluffy snow leopard pajamas.

History: Avali generally had a peaceful upbringing until her home was destroyed by creatures of Grimm when she was twelve, her being the only survivor through a combination of hiding skills and running like hell. She hadn't learned to use her weapon at that point in time. After that happened, she went to live with her uncle in one of the more protected regions of Vale and spent a lot of her life there up until entering Beacon Academy. She'll tell anyone who asks that she decided to become a Huntress as a great, big 'screw you' to the Grimm.

Personality: Avali generally avoids people she already knows that aren't her friends, especially disliking snobby rich people and callous jerkwads, but enjoys meeting new people and is surprisingly open to those she considers her friends. She feels more comfortable as a follower than a leader, not being particularly capable in the leadership department. She spends most of her free time standing somewhere random and thinking about her existence.  Despite these 'emo thoughts,' as she calls them, she remains upbeat, and is not known for using curse words unless something really gets on her nerves, the closest she usually gets to that being calling someone a butthair. She shows a strong aversion to physical contact, becoming visibly uncomfortable when touched.

Aura and Semblance: Avali slashes the air, creating an Aura-colored energy wave in the shape of a giant claw slash. It deals massive damage to a single target, usually enough to defeat them or at least weaken them greatly. However, the wave travels at the speed of someone walking in a casual manner, and only ever hits if the target is frozen, distracted, or otherwise in a situation where they won't be able to dodge in time. Using this claw also drains her, slowing her down for a while and leaving her vulnerable. She's never used it twice in the same battle. Her Aura manifests in a light green color.

Combat Behavior: In battle against creatures of Grimm, Avali rarely uses her Semblance, instead preferring to focus on staying out of range and shooting with her weapon. She only ever uses her Semblance against a single strong opponent, anything else being a pointless waste of energy. However, just a few good hits and she's done for. In a battle against an actual person, her strategy revolves around being frustratingly hard to hit while sometimes shooting at the legs, and then going in for a claw strike when the opponent is too busy fuming to pay attention. When that fails, she starts going all-out with the blade.

WEAPON

Name: Avali is terrible at naming, and therefore the weapon has no name.

Primary Form: Avali's weapon resembles a strange hybrid between a bow and a short-sword. It has a guard where a bow would typically be held to protect her hand from the blade that lines its front. The weapon is typically wielded like a regular bow, but can be switched to her other hand and held sideways to be used as a slashing weapon.

Secondary Form: The weapon has no secondary form.

Tertiary Form: The weapon has no tertiary form.

Dust Functions: Avali's bow utilizes Ice Dust to give the arrows a chilling effect.

History: This weapon was given to Avali by her father, who was later gruesomely killed in the attack that destroyed her home.
« Last Edit: September 30, 2016, 08:34:36 AM by savannahs1 »
Avali Glass, a first year Beacon student and professional moron.

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Re: Avali Glass, Excuse my Crappiness
« Reply #1 on: September 28, 2016, 10:59:26 PM »
Welcome to RWBY-RPG.

I guess the thing that stands out most in this profile is the idea that one could be corrupted by Grimm blood.  My hesitation with the concept is for several reasons.  First, how does Grimm blood last in her system long enough to corrupt the character, given that Grimm blood and whatnot seems to disappear rather quickly after death.  Second, how does the concept of "corruption" even work, and what does it really mean?  At the moment, we are not exactly sure what Grimm are beyond creatures of darkness.  They lack aura, so some sort of unintentional aura grafting seems unlikely, and as mentioned above, their blood should dissipate quickly, so some sort of physical reaction (though how a physical reaction would impart Grimm abilities is a bit beyond me, as well) also seems unlikely.

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Re: Avali Glass, Excuse my Crappiness
« Reply #2 on: September 28, 2016, 11:01:39 PM »
Yeah, that's kind of hard to explain... But like you said, we don't know all that much about the Grimm yet except that they like to eat faces. We don't know what some of them are capable of.
« Last Edit: September 28, 2016, 11:04:40 PM by savannahs1 »
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Re: Avali Glass, Excuse my Crappiness
« Reply #3 on: September 28, 2016, 11:53:35 PM »
I suggest you avoid the corruption thing via grimm blood and stick to maybe a mental or physical trauma(those are all the rage nowadays apparently). I also suggest avoiding hybrid human/faunus + grimm characters

Species. Add what faunus type she is.

So, History is lacking, all it has is that one event in her life. Is nothing else important?

Personality. Grimm senses are a no-no. Unless that's what her semblance is gonna be.

Semblance. You can choose to have the claw not take a toll on your aura but rather stamina instead. Up to you but obviously the latter is more practical.

Flesh out combat behavior. Read a few profiles to get an idea how long and detailed they should be.





Students
Wisteria Lockheart - 1st Year student at Beacon. "Don't make me throw a book at you"
Shiroe Pendragon - 1st Year Student at beacon - "This is my monochrome reality" - Team MARS
Lavender du Lac - 1st Year Student at Haven -  "The harder I try the further things drift away."
Ayaka Miyamoto - 1st Year student at Beacon. "Tsubame Gaeshi!" - Team ALIA
Vermilion Desdemona - 3rd Year Student at Beacon - "Only time you'd be above me is when your head rests on my pike"
Talen de L'eglantine - 3rd Year Student at Beacon
Kei Almas - 4th Year Student at Beacon - "Everything is ripe for the taking!"
Aurum LeBlanc - 3rd Year Student at Atlas - "Lay back, take it easy, and watch the comedy unfold"

Professors
Professor William Nox - "To contain the world in a grain of dust

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« Reply #4 on: September 29, 2016, 12:07:55 AM »
There probably aren't as many changes as I would have liked, because I need to go to bed, but I got rid of the corruption thing and changed some details about her that were a direct result of it.
Avali Glass, a first year Beacon student and professional moron.

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Re: Avali Glass, Excuse my Crappiness
« Reply #5 on: September 29, 2016, 12:24:38 AM »
well, just make all the changes you want whenever  you have time.  There's no rush to get things approved

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Re: Avali Glass, Excuse my Crappiness
« Reply #6 on: September 29, 2016, 08:42:55 AM »
Alright, I think it's done.
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Re: Avali Glass, Excuse my Crappiness
« Reply #7 on: September 29, 2016, 11:42:59 PM »
+1

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Re: Avali Glass
« Reply #8 on: September 29, 2016, 11:57:38 PM »
Nice! Thanks.
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Re: Avali Glass
« Reply #9 on: September 30, 2016, 12:40:50 AM »
As Funky said, welcome to the RP board! I'll do the second review:

History:
The history is a tad short and doesn't really say a whole lot about her backstory. What did her parents do for a living? What happened to her family after the Grimm attack?
The way the history is now, it's enough to pass...barely. Something to keep in mind in the future is to add more details as if you were painting a well-detailed picture for us to see.

Semblance:
A couple questions here:
1. How much is "Massive damage"? Can you give us an example of sorts?
2. How many times can she use her semblance before it drains her to the point that she can't use it anymore?

Everything else looks great. Overall, I enjoyed the simplicity that was kept with the character. Simple is always better in my opinion :)
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Re: Avali Glass
« Reply #10 on: September 30, 2016, 08:35:05 AM »
Alright, I tweaked the semblance info a bit and specified what she did after shit went down.
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Re: Avali Glass
« Reply #11 on: September 30, 2016, 12:12:45 PM »
Still pretty generalized with the damage on her semblance, but I won't make a big fuss about it. The drawbacks to it is enough for me to be fine with it.

Approved 2 of 2. Happy RPing :)
First Year Beacon Student: Rackley Winchester - The Hawkeye Sniper currently Teamless

Second Year Beacon Student: Jett Davenport - The Playful Shadow Knight of Team MLDC (Melodic)

Third Year Beacon Student: Suntalia Lyn Ryker - The Voice of Thunder currently Teamless

Fourth Year Beacon Student: Savas Carnelian - The Quiet Berserker Leader of Team SARK (Stark)

Beacon Professor: Oberon Falcov - The Man With A Plan / Team Strategy Teacher of Beacon