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Angelica Auburn
« on: November 10, 2016, 07:50:30 PM »
CHARACTER

Name:
Angelica Auburn

Age: 
36
Species and Gender:
Human Female

Symbol: 
A skull made out of spider webs

Occupation:
Mistral Hunter, Ex. Mafia Informer

Appearance:
Angelica is a light-brown skinned woman with dark frizzy hair jutting out in every direction. She stands at an impressive 5’ 10” but easily 6 foot when she wears heels on the rare occasion. Her skin is unblemished which is surprising for her age and occupation. Her warm green eyes betray nothing of her true capabilities and her smile lights up rooms. Her build is overall athletic like many other hunters while also being quite toned more like a swimmer’s and less like a body builder. She can usually be found in a very mafia-esque suit, which consists of a white dress shirt covered by a black blazer, black tie, suspenders, black dress pants, and black dress shoes with white trim. Overall a pretty standard formal attire. However there are some accessories to make her stand out. A skull made out of cobwebs is pinned on her chest accompanied by her trademark black fedora. She is often seen carrying a black messenger bag in which holds her weapon, Checkers. “Dad always told me to never be caught dead in anything less than flawless.”

History:

Ever wondered what it would be like for a saint at heart to be born into a mafia? Her name is Angelica Auburn and boy does she know that story. Born to Adande and Michelle Auburn, Angelica grew up in the love and care of both of her parents. They supported and loved her more than their parents had loved them. To them, Angelica was their treasure and legacy. She, from a young age displayed in many of the arts that Mistral had to offer. She loved the different forms of self-expression, practicing most of them in her spare time. Her favorite ones tended to be music and singing. She dabbled in art and humor but her true talent lied in her dedication to music. However, life had other plans for her.
As she grew up Angelica gradually became aware of the corrupt dealings that her family took apart of. While she was closely knit to her mother and father she also had many brothers, sisters, aunts, and uncles. She loved her family even if they tended to be over protective. She was the flower of the family after all. As she grew up she didn’t necessarily love the business but she sure as hell wanted to impress her family. She began taking up the family butlers offers of combat training and while it was a really slow start she made steady progress in leaning the art of fighting.
Yes growing up in a crime family had its benefits and downfalls. Her family was pretty known in the black market for information. If it existed they knew about it. You wanted a lot of dust for unknown reasons? They knew how to get it. You wanted lots of bombs for no reasons? No problem. You wanted to wreck your life by dosing up on so many drugs you lost your mind? They got your back. The services they offered was extensive but Angelica still struggled to find her place. She was just too kind to do much of it. That was until she found out about her semblance.
Angelica became quite the snitch, listening to conversations and gathering information from all over Mistral that landed in the black market. The family was quite pleased, until of course a hunter had come into her life. When Angelica met a hunter for the first time she fell in love with the job. She wanted to become a beacon of inspiration for children like her. She wanted to be a safe haven for the helpless. The family was in a panic until of course Angelica’s father put an end to this. They would support her choices and would allow her to become whatever she wanted to in life.

“Nothing you could do Angelica can change the fact that I love you.”
The next years would be brutal. Training was hard, intense and Angelica was struggling. Her semblance wasn’t exactly a crutch to be used. Her hands were the ones of an artist not a fighter. However, Angelica was determined to show the world it could be both. Some of the older butlers were ex-hunters. Her father commissioned them to train her so that she would be ready for Signal and they may have been a tad overzealous. Lacking proper training in the teaching category they taught her how their masters taught them. By driving her into the ground every day. They trained her in every form of combat imaginable trying to find one that suited her. She obtained a general knowledge over many different martial art styles and weapons. She became a jack-of-all-trades, not to say she didn’t keep up her arts. She became a renowned singer in many clubs around the area. She balanced her pleasures and determination expertly. After many, many failures she showed enough progress to be accepted into Haven. In order to maintain a good image, she had to cut all communication with her family. The parting was filled with many tearful good byes. However, this was her life and she was going to live it.

When she entered Haven she was a little below average in strictly combat terms. Her “teachers” had taught her enough to get accepted but it was up to her to become a huntress on her own. She sure as hell wasn’t about to lose her dream to incompetance. She learned to become a deadly killer and enemy to Grimm. Once the very few students who recognized her last name stopped isolating her she became quite well liked due to her kind personality and caring nature. She grew in leaps and bounds as the team leader to team ANGL. Her teammates came to find out whom she was and they accepted her. This was one of the best highs of her life. She had finally discovered a place where she belonged. Her teammates pushed her to become stronger and with their help she was able to become the fighter she is today. One of the only teams to stay together after their graduation they made a name for themselves using their unique brand of teamwork and strength.
The next few years were filled with missions and adventures. Eventually however it was time for them to split apart at least for a little while
Angelica, an artist who became a warrior. A person who proved that you don’t need “natural aptitude” to become a great hunter was ready to go home. She was ready to go and inspire more kids like her who want to become hunters and don’t feel they have the talent. Angelica was coming home. She took 4 years to explore the sights that Mistral had to offer. She practiced arts that she was never able to see before. Now away from most supervision she could have contact with her family much more often. Her 4 years of exploring and fighting off Grimm solo came to a quick end when Angelica received a phone call. She was told to find somewhere to sit down through sobs and fits of crying.

“Where did dad go Angelica? When is he coming back?”

Angelica didn’t know how to answer Madelyn as she tugged at her dress. She was too busy trying to process what had happened. Her father had been taken along with a few others. Enough evidence had been compiled to convict them. Her father was on death row and the others imprisoned with very little chance for parole. It was like a part of Angelica inside had shattered in that moment when she had found out. The family had gathered and they all spoke in hushed tone. Like they were mourning for a man who was still breathing. Angelica didn’t come out of her room that night. She screamed and destroyed. She cried like the little child who had left this house 5 years ago. She cried like the girl who had sobbed into her father’s shirt when her brother broke her favorite toy. Anger turned into sadness, which turned into apathy. Life wasn’t fair. She couldn’t choose between her family and the life she chose to lead. She was right it wasn’t a choice. To her there was only one thing that she could do. She was bringing back the man that let her carry this scythe knowing full well that one day it might be buried in his back.

6 months later...

7 cells were filled with prisoners scattered across the prison. At 12 o clock midnight a figure walks into the hallway through the wall. At 12:10 all the cells are empty as men and women from all over the prison disappear one by one file into the same place the figure came out of. At 12:15 hunter Gregory Steel, former 2nd in command of team ANGL engages the figure that breached the facility. The feed breaks for an indefinite amount of time before a rescue team retrieves the unconscious Mr. Steel. The whereabouts of the prisoners are currently unknown. Angelica wished she could have said she did such an amazing feat alone. It would have been impossible if anyone else had been the one who confronted her. Anyone else but an ex-teammate. 
The next days were followed by an endless celebration. The safe return of the father and daughter was a great achievement. Of course the whole family needed to go underground but at least they were together. Except for…

“I can’t stay Dad. . .every minute I stay it just gets more dangerous an-“

“-You make me proud Angelica. The proudest a father could be. What you did was reckless as fuck and stupid as hell but you stuck to your guns and did what you thought was right. You need to go, I know. I’ll tell your brothers and sisters you said goodbye. Just remember your ol’ man and nothing you could do Angelica can change the fact that I love you.”

So Angelica left her family again. Wondering whether the decisions she made was right. Hey exploring Mistral wasn’t that bad solo. Maybe it was time she paid Vale a visit…
 
Personality:
Angelica is an extremely emotional individual as compared to a lot of other people her age. Not in the crying sense but in the fact that she has a lot of compassion. She cares a lot about people and children. She shares a kindness with everybody she meets and has a hard time in battle to keep her emotions at bay even after 8 years of fighting in the business. Blessed with unrestricted mouth she tends to cuss a fuck ton and make quick witted comments at the best of times. She enjoys reading and writing as her favorite hobbies along with long walks at the beach. She dabbles in poetry and is trying her best to get into painting. When it comes to intelligence Angelica is average in math, chemistry and biology. However, she prestigious talent in music singing and dance while currently seeking out opportunities to improve her drawing/painting. One of her more hidden interests is humor. She secretly wants to be a comedian when she grows up. Angelica is a very soft and gentle individual who has chosen to take a path that wasn’t meant for her and toughed it out the whole way through.

Aura and Semblance:
Skeleton Key            Aura colour: Cadet Blue #7ac5cd
As a professional hunter Angelica’s aura is average for her age. She can use it offensively, defensively, as well as all the effects (sensing, strength, aura blasts,) that come with it.
Skeleton Key is a teleportation semblance that works a little differently than others. Skeleton key allows Angelica to create a door-shaped portal which bridges two places instantly allowing her to walk through them like one would a door. The door disappears when Angelica dismisses it. When the portal is created anything can go through it, including enemies and bullets. Her semblance technically has infinite range but for every 15m it takes her 1 second to create the portal, which subjects her, to be interrupted. Cool down and physical exertion between door creation doubles for every door. It discourages her from using this semblance for combat purposes but doesn’t stop her entirely. The cool down build up refreshes back to 0 every time she waits the same amount of seconds equivalent to the distance she traveled/2. So for 15m she would have to wait around 7.5 seconds before she can use her semblance again without the cost doubling. To keep a door open Angelica spends a minute amount of strength to keep the portal open. However the toll stacks with the more portals she creates. She can hold around 10 portals out at once before the toll becomes too heavy to handle.

To create a door Angelica must be within eyesight of the location or meet certain conditions. A detailed picture of the desired location accompanied by exact geographical coordinates is enough for Dorothy to make a door to the location. The physical toll on her body is a lot more when creating and maintaining doors in this manner. If not enough information is given then a door will be created in the general area of where the specs were given. (The rescue mission took months of planning and people getting information for her on the inside.)

Combat Behavior: 
The entire of Angelica’s arsenal screams mid-ranged fighter. She moves extremely fast using superior speed and years of training to cut down foes at a quick rate. Using sweeping arcs and heavy blows she utilizes the scythe function of her weapon to maximum efficiency. When on the offensive she tends to rush her opponent down and keep attacking with speed and strength that is above average even for hunter levels. If her offensive techniques with her scythe don’t work she uses the Tommy gun to turn her target into Swiss cheese. The rapid fire of the gun shred opponent’s aura and softens them up for the edge of her scythe. Angelica is weakest when she is defending. She can’t use her speed or strength to maximum efficiency and blocking/parrying with a scythe can be awkward. Her best offense is avoiding being hit all together and waiting for a chance to turn the tables by going on the offensive again. A master of evasiveness reaction and speed Angelica makes herself an extremely annoying target to focus down. On both offensive and defensive Angelica uses her doors to trick and confuse her opponent making the entire match feel like a maze. She will disappear around a corner only to reappear somewhere else and open fire. Sometimes she will open a door where the opponent can’t see and fire through it only for the opponent to take fire from a door open behind them. Angelica turns every match into a game. Her weaknesses in fights rest in her fighting style. People who can keep Angelica on defense put her in her weakest state long enough to put her at a severe disadvantage.  People who snipe from long distances can definitely outclass her if they force her to engage in a combat of gunfire. Angelica can’t take too many hits when fighting people of sheer physical strength. Hunters who wield extremely heavy weapons (Hammers and Axes) pose a threat as their strength is enough to cause serious damage to her reserves quickly. Harshly punishing her for any mistakes that she makes while fighting.

WEAPON

Name:
Checkers
Primary Form:
A black scythe with white blade. There are many different connections and sections that run along the blade, which connect to a giant circle. The pole of the scythe is a straight black piece of metal, which has parts bulging out of it. The parts jutting out of the pole belong to the secondary form of Checkers, which is the Tommy gun. To transform between scythe and gun the blade’s sections wrap around the giant circle much like how Qrow’s blade turns into a scythe but a circle. The circle flips from being perpendicular to the pole to parallel while the shaft shortens to form the Tommy gun. The pieces that were jetting out before become the handle and body of the gun. The giant circle becomes the ammunition drum.
Secondary Form:
The second form of Checkers is a White Tommy gun with a black trim. The transformation between gun and blade is the opposite of blade to gun. There is an inscription of writing on the side of the gun that reads “From Mistral with Love <3”
The gun fires at around 725rpm and can fire a lot longer than normal guns of its brand. The drum is filled with dust crystals, which can produce more then one bullet per crystal before they are drained. The bullets that the crystals create are not aligned to any specific element but are a mix of kenetic dust (the core) and a lightning dust shell, which packs quite a punch at close to mid-range. The gun unfortunately becomes a less accurate at long range due its nature and how the bullets work. The total effect is an aura-shredding machine, which can fire at about 2-3 mins. Angelica always carries an extra drum with her on her located on her lower back hidden beneath her blazer.

Tertiary Form:
The drum turns it’s sideways and the other parts of the gun collapse to make the whole thing fit inside the messenger bag she is carrying.

Dust Functions:
Checkers has two dust functions. When loaded up with an electric dust cartridge the blade of the scythe becomes electrified sending an extremely strong current to whomever it hits. The current stuns the target for 3 seconds and gradually wears off over a 10 second period. The second function is a fire dust which heats up the blade to extreme temperatures adding a hefty burn damage to blows (Around 10% to people of her level). The blade burns at around 200 degrees, enough to cause a severe 3rd degree burn if one is exposed to it without aura. Each effect can last for about 2-3 minutes of use before dissipating.     

History:
It was a gift from her father for her 17th birthday.
“Happy Birthday cupcake. You have many years of trial and tribulation in front of you. But if anyone fuck’s wit’cha kill em dead for me understand?”

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Re: Angelica Auburn
« Reply #1 on: November 14, 2016, 10:31:53 PM »


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Appearance:
Angelica is a light brown skinned woman with dark frizzy hair frizzing out everywhere. She stands at an impressive 5’ 10” but easily 6 foot when she wears heels on the rare occasion. Her skin is unblemished which is surprising for her age and occupation. Her warm green eyes betray nothing of her true capabilities and her smile lights up rooms. Her build is overall athletic like many other hunters while also being quite toned more like a swimmer’s and less like a body builder. She can usually be found in a very mafia-esque suit, which consists of a white dress shirt covered by a black blazer, black tie, suspenders, black dress pants, and black dress shoes with white trim. Overall a pretty standard formal attire. However there are some accessories to make her stand out. A skull made out of cobwebs is pinned on her chest accompanied by her trademark black fedora. She is often seen carrying a black messenger bag in which holds Checkers. “Dad always told me to never be caught dead in anything less than flawless.”
1. Add a hyphen or two.
2. Slightly redundant.
3. Clarifiy that it's her weapon. "...holds her weapon, Checkers"

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History: Ever wondered what it would be like for a saint at heart to be born into a mafia? Her name is Angelica Auburn and boy does she know that story. Born to Adande and Michelle Auburn, Angelica grew up in the love and care of birth of her parents. They supported and loved her more than their parents had loved them. To them, Angelica was their treasure and legacy. She, from a young age displayed talent in all the arts. She could write and dance. She sung with blue birds in the morning and practiced painting at night. She was an all around prodigy in a land that would become her canvass. However life had other plans for her.
1. I assume "both"
2. Missing the closing comma.
3. Hmmm...

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As she grew up Angelica gradually became aware of the corrupt dealings that her family took apart of. While she was closely knit to her mother and father she also had many brothers, sisters, aunts, and uncles. She knew them all by name and they all agreed that they would fight hell and back to defend her. She was the flower of the family after all. As she grew up she didn’t necessarily love the business but she sure as hell wanted to impress her family. She began taking up the family butlers offers of combat training and while it was a really slow start she did learn at a child's pace.
1. I don't see why they wouldn't want to defend her already unless she were a terrible person.
2. Reword.

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Yes growing up in a crime family had its benefits and downfalls. Her family was pretty known in the black market for information. If it existed they knew about it. You wanted a lot of dust for unknown reasons? They knew how to get it. You wanted lots of bombs for no reasons? No problem. You wanted to wreck your life by dosing up on so many drugs you lost your mind? They got your back. The services they offered was extensive but Angelica still struggled to find her place. She was just too kind to do much of it. That was until she found out about her semblance.
Possibly encroaching into WB territory with how influential/powerful/infamous you make them out to be.

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Angelica became quite the snitch, listening to conversations and gathering information from all over Mistral that landed in the black market. The family was quite pleased, until of course a hunter had come into her life. When Angelica met a hunter for the first time she fell in love with the job. She wanted to become a beacon of inspiration for children like her. She wanted to be a safe haven for the helpless. The family was in a panic until of course Angelica’s father put an end to this. They would support her choices and would allow her to become what ever she wanted to in life.
“Nothing you could do Angelica can change the fact that I love you.”
And so it began, Angelica’s training for Haven Academy began.
Redundant.

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The next years would be brutal. Training was hard, intense and Angelica was struggling. Her semblance wasn’t exactly a crutch to be used. Her hands were the ones of an artist not a fighter. However Angelica was determined to show the world it could be both. The butlers were all ex-hunters in nature and drove her into the ground every day. They trained her in every form of combat imaginable trying to find one that suited her. She obtained a general knowledge over many different martial art styles and weapons. She became a jack-of-all-trades. Not to say she didn’t keep up her arts. She became a renowned singer in many clubs around the area. She balanced her pleasures and determination expertly. After many, many failures she showed enough progress to be accepted into Haven. In order to maintain a good image she had to cut all communication with her family. The parting was filled with many tearful good byes. However this was her life and she was going to live it.
1. Hmmm... (clarify)
2. Combine sentences.

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When she entered Haven she was a little below average but she sure as hell didn’t leave it like that. Her butlers were excellent hunters but not the best teachers, which can make a big difference. She learned to become a deadly killer and enemy to Grimm. Once the very few students who recognized her last name stopped isolating her she became quite well liked due to her kind personality and caring nature. She grew in leaps and bounds as the team leader to team ANGL. Her teammates came to find out whom she was and they accepted her. This was one of the best highs of her life. She had finally discovered a place where she belonged. Her teammates pushed her to become stronger and with their help she was able to become the fighter she is today. They grew close and even as they had to part ways they promised that they would always be there for each other through thick and thin.
1. Below average in what exactly?

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The next 8 years were filled with missions and adventures. Eventually however it was time for them to split apart at least for a little while
Angelica, an artist who became a warrior. A person who proved that you don’t need “natural aptitude” to become a great hunter was ready to go home. She was ready to go and inspire more kids like her who want to become hunters and don’t feel they have the talent. Angelica was coming home. She took 4 years to explore the sights that Mistral had to offer. She practiced arts that she was never able to see before. Now away from most supervision she could have contact with her family much more often. Her 4 years of exploring and fighting off Grimm solo came to a quick end when Angelica received a phone call. She was told to find somewhere to sit down through sobs and fits of crying.
I'm confused. Did she not graduate in the previous paragraph? Was she still with her teammates?
1. Cut one.

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“Where did dad go Angelica? When is he coming back?”

Angelica didn’t know how to answer Madelyn as she tugged at her dress. She was too busy trying to process what had happened. Angelica tried not to cry but it was so hard with tears coming down her face. Her father had been taken along with a few others. Enough evidence had been compiled to convict them. They were on death row and were to be executed soon. It was like a part of Angelica inside had shattered in that moment when she had found out. The family had gathered and they all spoke in hushed tone. Like they were mourning for a man who was still breathing. Angelica didn’t come out of her room that night. She screamed and destroyed. She cried like the little child who had left this house 5 years ago. She cried like the girl who had sobbed into her father’s shirt when her brother broke her favorite toy. Anger turned into sadness, which turned into apathy. Life wasn’t fair. She couldn’t choose between her family and the life she chose to lead. She was right it wasn’t a choice. To her there was only one thing that she could do. She was bringing back the man that let her carry this scythe knowing full well that one day it might be buried in his back.
Death penalty for everyone? That's really pushing it.
1. Reword/clarify.

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7 cells were filled with prisoners on death row. At 12 o clock midnight a figure walks into the hallway through the wall. At 12:10 all the cells are empty as men and women file into the same place the figure came out of. At 12:15 hunter Gregory Steel, former 2nd in command of team ANGL engages the figure that breached the facility. The feed breaks for an indefinite amount of time before a rescue team retrieves the unconscious Mr. Steel. The whereabouts of the prisoners are currently unknown.

“Gregory you know why I’m doing this please don’t make this harder than it needs to be.”
“Angelica you want ME, a PROFESSIONAL hunter to help you save criminals just because they're your family?"
"...yes?"
"*HEAVY SIGHING* Save your family Angelica, I’ll cut the cameras just one thing… Not the face please.”
I owe you one Gregory…
10/10 security.

Dipping down to fine details slogs down the(read: any) History, just sayin' (I've done it twice myself so I know).  You can keep it as is or you can make it more concise, doesn't really matter for approval's sake since it's specifically a design choice.
 
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Personality:
Angelica is an extremely emotional individual as compared to a lot of other people her age. Not in the crying sense but in the fact that she has a lot of compassion. She cares a lot about people and children. She shares a kindness with everybody she meets and has a hard time in battle to keep her emotions at bay even after 8 years of fighting in the business. This doesn't exactly make her perfec however. Blessed with unrestricted mouth she tends to cuss a fuck ton and make quick witted comments at the best of times. She enjoys reading and writing as her favourite hobbies along with long walks at the beach. She dabbles in poetry and is trying her best to get into painting. When it comes to intelligence Angelica is average in math, chemistry and biology. However she prestigious talent in music singing and dance while currently seeking out opportunities to improve her drawing/painting. One of her more hidden interests is humour. She secretly wants to be a comedian when she grows up. Angelica is a very soft and gentle individual who has chosen to take a path that wasn’t meant for her and toughed it out the whole way through.
Not seeing how having unrestricted/loose emotions would make her seem perfect.
1. "Perfect".

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Aura and Semblance:
Skeleton Key            Aura colour: Cadet Blue #7ac5cd
As a professional hunter Angelica’s aura is near perfection. She can use it offensively, defensively, as well as all the effects (sensing, strength, aura blasts,) that come with it.
Skeleton Key is a teleportation semblance that works a little differently than others. Skeleton key allows Angelica to create a door-shaped portal which bridges two places instantly allowing her to walk through them like one would a door. The door disappears when Angelica dismisses it. When the portal is created anything can go through it, including enemies and bullets. Her semblance technically has infinite range but for every 15m it takes her 1 second to create the portal, which subjects her, to be interrupted. Cool down and physical exertion between door creation doubles for every door. It discourages her from using this semblance for combat purposes but doesn’t stop her entirely. The cool down build up refreshes back to 0 every time she waits the same amount of seconds equivalent to the distance she traveled/2. So for 15m she would have to wait around 7.5 seconds before she can use her semblance again without the cost doubling.

Passively this semblance allows her to open any door by touching it and saying, “open”. (This is removable I just thought it was cool.)
Portal upkeep required. How is she able to create portals in places she hasn't been to (such as death row)?
Door thing can also be abused in some situations so yeah.

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Combat Behavior: 
The entire of Angelica’s arsenal screams mid-ranged fighter. She moves extremely fast using superior speed and years of training to cut down foes at a quick rate. Using sweeping arcs and heavy blows she utilises the scythe function of her weapon to maximum efficiency. When on the offensive she tends to rush her opponent down and keep attacking with speed that is above average even for hunter levels. She possesses immense strength as well, using her aura to boost her strength. If her offensive techniques with her scythe don’t work she uses the Tommy gun to turn her target into swiss cheese. The rapid fire of the gun shred opponent’s aura and softens them up for the edge of her scythe. On the defensive, while awkward at times, Angelica defends herself with her scythe and her agility. A master of evasiveness reaction and speed Angelica makes herself an extremely annoying target to focus down. On both offensive and defensive Angelica uses her doors to trick and confuse her opponent making the entire match feel like a maze. She will disappear around a corner only to reappear somewhere else and open fire. Sometimes she will open a door where the opponent can’t see and fire through it only for the opponent to take fire from a door open behind them. Angelica turns every match into a game. Too bad she doesn’t lose. Her weaknesses in fights rest in her fighting style. People who can get into extremely close range and STAY there for long periods of time circumvent the point of her scyth and have a better chance at wearing her down faster than she can kill them. People who snipe from long distances can definitely outclass her if they force her to engaged in a combat of gunfire.
Extremely fast, extremely agile, and immensely strong. You're putting too much on one plate I think, even as a 30-year-old Huntress. Also, add a couple more weaknesses, please.
1. Remove entirely.

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The second form of Checkers is a White Tommy gun with a black trim. The transformation between gun and blade is the opposite of blade to gun. There is an inscription of writing on the side of the gun that reads “From Mistral with Love <3”
The gun fires at around 725rpm and can fire a lot longer than normal guns of its brand. The drum is filled with dust crystals, which can produce more then one bullet per crystal before they are drained. The bullets that the crystals create are not aligned to any specific element but are a mix of neutral dust (the core) and a kinetic dust shell, which packs quite a punch at close to mid range. The gun unfortunately becomes a less accurate at long range due its nature and how the bullets work. The total effect is an aura-shredding machine, which can fire at about 2-3 mins. Angelica always carries an extra drum with her on her located on her lower back hidden beneath her blazer.
Basically firing energy projectiles which would whimper out fairly quickly due to their small size. Why not just 'normal' rounds?
"Actual energy weapons can be used by basically using a projectile made of pure kinetic dust mixed with another type, probably lighting dust" - Gus

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Dust Functions:
Checkers has two dust functions. When loaded up with an electric dust cartridge the blade of the scythe becomes electrified sending an extremely strong current to whomever it hits. The current stuns targets for 3 seconds and gradually wears off over a 10 second period. The second function is a fire dust which heats up the blade to extreme temperatures adding a hefty burn damage to blows (Around 10% to people of her level). Each effect can last for about 2-3 minuets of use before dissipating.     
How hot exactly or vaguely-yet-more-descriptively?
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Re: Angelica Auburn
« Reply #2 on: November 15, 2016, 09:49:39 AM »
History:
Grammar has been fixed along with some changes being made to make her seem less Mrs.perfect when she was growing up.
Things you asked me to clarify
I made her focus on music and singing instead of being a prodigy in literally everything
The family is right now disbanded and underground. Laying low after the government found out about them. (If I ever decide to make an actual thread involving her family then Il make a WB but for now they can't affect anyone in the role play verse.)
The graduation sentence was a mistake. Her team stayed together a bit after graduation to do missions and shit.
Yeah I know 10/10 security, but we are talking about a world where the world leaders in science and technology got all their robots hacked and reprogrammed to kill what they were trying to protect. And Roman...Roman too.
Also added a little planning time so it doesn't look like she just walked in and walked out.

Semblance
Added upkeep cost
If she is given a picture and exact geographic locations she can create a door. The more specific the better.

Combat Behaviour
Added more weaknesses and changed age to 36 for reasons

Weapon
Hot hot fire is more detailed
Bullets are dust mix of kinetic and lightning.
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Re: Angelica Auburn
« Reply #3 on: November 16, 2016, 11:43:16 AM »
Other major problems seem to have been resolved. Also, thank you for not making it hot enough to cut through metal.

Anyway, still hesitant on passing Combat Behavior, probably due to the line "above average even for hunters levels." I can see her having above average speed, but if we're talking raw strength, I can't really buy it (mostly because she is supposed to be a fine artist). Now, if she is tapping into her aura to put her strength above that of the raw strength of the average Huntsmen/Huntress, then that'd be fine. Also, not being able to take hits from heavy weapon users kinda applied to everyone except for the toughest of tanks. Last, since I can guarantee it would be brought up in the future, reword "master of evasiveness" into something less...y'know. Yeah.

Finally, Fair Warning: She broke a bunch of people out of prison. The possibility of consequences will be there should you choose to roll with it.
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Re: Angelica Auburn
« Reply #4 on: November 20, 2016, 08:13:55 PM »
You bring up a couple fair points but to be faire I really think I missed the mark on this one. She's too many things at once that clash with each other. I think I need to take a good look at her history and what I want this character to be before we continue.

Thanks for reviewing as much as you have but I think if I want this character to be roleplayable then it's going to need more work then i've currently put in.

So for now i will move this to MIA
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Dorothy Burgundy 3rd Year Shade, Elite Scavenger "Treasure is everywhere, you just need to know where to look!"
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