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CHARACTER

Name: Sakino 'Kitsune' Mura

Age: 17

Species and Gender: Fox Faunus Intersex (looks female, but prefers to be anonymous in his/her true gender. Can be called whatever the viewer prefers)

Symbol:  http://pathfinderwiki.com/mediawiki/images/d/d9/Daikitsu_holy_symbol.jpg
(Specifically the fox)

Occupation: Beacon student

Appearance: An unassuming 'female' standing at 4'2" (short stature is a thing that can cause people to be way shorter than average), Mura's favorite color is purple. They wear mostly androgynous versions of clothes, including various shades of red, blue, and mostly purple. Mura has very pale skin and moderate length auburn hair. Even though they look like a female, they are actually intersex, containing male and female genitalia. They mostly wear 'traditional' Japanese haori, with the addition of a hanzashyi. They also wear a rainbow colored infinity scarf (Yang's scarf). Mura is heterochromatic, having one golden and one bright blue eye. They have one fox tail, with an interesting function (see aura and semblance). Out of combat, any style of loosely fitting clothes are options, as long as they are at least purple.

History: Sakino Mura was born on Niege 13, to Ketsue Sakino and Kimi Yuki (her maiden name, which everyone calls her), Mura's fox Faunus father and human mother, respectively. Mura also has a fraternal twin sister, Mōbu. The two have a very interesting feature, being chimeras. The two have what looks to be parts of each other woven into themselves and share others. One feature they share is genitalia, having both male and female genitalia. No one in the family knows how this came to be, as both children appear female while clothed. Mura also has one of her 'sister's' eyes, while Mōbu has two blue eyes. Mōbu has a fondness for her femininity, saying she is a girl with some male anatomy. Mura, however, has no idea about what gender they want to be, usually using androgynous words to describe themselves. Mura has actually joined the peaceful section of the White Fang, who approved of them to become a hunter (this is used genderless). Mura is not ashamed or deterred of being White Fang, but they don't say it unless asked, to which people recieve a nonchalant 'yes, the equality oriented faction'. Mura applied for Signal soon after awakening their aura and semblance, seeing it as their chance to see the world, meet people and find love, a sentiment Mōbu didn't share. They forged Kōkatsuna Fokkusubureido and Kareina baransuburēdo, as well as continuously maintaining three pouches of twenty instances of Jinsokuna ningen no ha each. They made many friends and got near perfect grades. They also fell in love. She was a lovely girl, already having confessed to her own family about being bisexual by the time she met Mura. The two went on many dates and were quite a good fit for each other, the two dated till both were 16, the first time they attempted sex. That night ended with a crying Mura preventing Mōbu, the only other person in the house, from chasing and killing the girl who ran out of the house yelling the one word Mura fears most, 'freak'. That was two months before graduation, which they nearly didn't attend. It took Mōbu, the one who wanted her sibling to be safe, to remind Mura of why they went to the academy in the first place.

Personality: Mura takes after both their parents and sister. Being quite social and eager to please. They have a particular fondness for riddles. Mura is insulted when called a hermaphrodite, and is quite fervent in explaining the difference between a hermaphrodite and an intersex. Mura is more attracted to females, but is willing to find love wherever they can. Despite being very confident around others, Mura is incredibly fearful of being called a freak due to their gender. Mura is against sexism, but is too scared to actually act on it. If called a freak, Mura will likely pull a Blake (run away and have their team/friends find them). They are addicted to all types of tea, but is especially attached to green tea. Mura has been classified as 'multi-mood' by both friends and family, as well as 'psycho' by strangers, due to their tendency to shift to extremes of emotions instantaneously and at the slightest trigger, crying their eyes out one second then attack the person who insulted them the next. Most experts say that this is due to conflicting male and female hormones, which Mura says is a hormone imbalance. Mura is interested in various forms of everything, such as music on both the orchestral/dubstep and rock/country axes. They love anything that has a special meaning, such as Shirk's song Haunted. Despite their friendly attitude, Mura has self esteem issues, often curling up in a corner after an insult, no matter how slight, and is always blushing of some form of embarrassment. They are, however, very trusting and extremely loyal to a cause they believe in.

Aura and Semblance: Mura's Aura is surprisingly khaki. No one truly knows why. Mura's semblance is illusory copies, allowing them to make perfect copies of any object they see. Mura can create up to eight copies of the same object and control them perfectly. This, however, takes total concentration, causing them to not be able to move, talk or do anything that requires focus. In combat, four copies can be made while still allowing them to fight, but this still takes effort and hampers combat. Their true strategy is to create only one copy, which takes little effort to create, maintain and manipulate. The illusions can be moved by mental command, but are non-solid and create no sound, smell, force, nor perception. For every illusion created, Mura gains an illusory tail, leading to the nickname 'kitsune'. If creating an illusion of an object or person other than themselves, this requires visualization or familiarity, lest the object become malformed.

Combat Behavior:  Mura uses subterfuge, stealth, and a gratuitous amount of illusions in combat. They always favor using Baransu in sniper form to pick off vulnerable and/or individual opponents. At medium to close range range, Katsu in rifle form sees much use. When silence is required, Mura moves in closer to be able to use Sokuna. In melee, Sokuna is shifted into kunai to be used as a dagger. Despite the fact Mura carries so many weapons, and is willing to have more, they only ever wield one at a time. They also do not believe in shields.

WEAPON

Name: Kōkatsuna Fokkusubureido (commonly Katsu)

Primary Form: A katana with a 26" blade.
http://www.weapons-universe.com/Martial-Arts/Martial-Arts-Swords/Blood-64.jpg

Secondary Form: The blade straightens and opens, forming a barrel and casing. The seven inches of the tip fold into the body. The grip bends at the hilt, all together forming an assault rifle.

Tertiary Form: The tip can pop out and form a bayonet

Dust Functions: The blade can be wrapped in an element, taking on an aura of said element. Fire, however, Mura puts through a special process to have the flame burn blue.

History: Kōkatsuna Fokkusubureido, or Cunning Fox Blade, is Mura's main weapon. Mura forged this blade in representation of their quest for the knowledge to make life better, prioritizing others over them self. The name is regularly shortened to Katsu by others and even Mura in combat. Mura has given Katsu a male identity, and sheathes him on their left side.

Name: Kareina baransuburēdo (commonly Baransu)

Primary Form: Baransu is an ōdachi, one with a purple grip and massive 56" length (4'8"). (The largest blade ever wielded was a 7' Scottish claymore weighing 26 lb.)

Secondary Form: Baransu's blade straightens out and opens, revealing a long barrel. The grip bends at the hilt, moving forward on the blade, forming stock, grip, and trigger. A scope is then attached to the top by Mura, forming a sniper rifle with an effective range of 1,700 meters or 1,859 yards but can hit a target within 2,300 meters or 2515 yards.

History: Kareina baransuburēdo, or Splendorous Balance Blade, is Mura's heavy hitter. Mura forged this blade to represent Mura's view of everything having a bright side, even Grimm. In that case, though, it is tat they can be driven off. Baransu is the given nickname for the same reason as Katsu. Baransu was given no true gender designation, and shall be referred to as androgynous such as they. Due to her size, Baransu is strapped at an angle on Mura's back.

Name: Jinsokuna ningen no ha (commonly called Sokuna)

Primary Form: Each instance of Sokuna is a shuriken, all of which are colored blue. Each curved blade gives it a length of 10 cm. Each instance has three blades

Secondary Form: Each instance can combine two blades and round out the third, making a kunai for close melee.

History: Jinsokuna ningen no ha, or Swift Human Blade, is one of many identically shaped and named shuriken, stored in sets of 20 in three pouches, totaling 60. Each blade represents Mura's drive to keep moving and to be quick enough to be there for a friend, which everyone is. Sokuna is this one's given name, and is given femininity. She is always a she, no matter how many of her are missing. The total mass actually matches that of Katsu, marking the two as equals.
« Last Edit: May 30, 2017, 08:21:12 PM by Pyro_Ferno »
Nero LaFatch- Smoke Specter of team ATLA (Atlas): "Silent as Smoke"

Mura Sakino- Capricious Kitsune of Team CARM (Carmine): "I don't know how to respond to that..."

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Re: Sakino Mura (Japanese format so first name Mura)
« Reply #1 on: May 21, 2017, 01:17:53 AM »
You mention camera's once in your combat behaviour but not anywhere else so some detail there might help. Like when does she set up the cameras? How are they hidden? How does she see what they see? etc etc.

I dislike this line 'Due to his/her mostly male hormones, he/she is more attracted to females,' poofs might be queer but they don't have less male hormones and the line between male hormones and sexuality isn't proven in either direction.

But yea I like them, it's a pretty big departure from Nero and I wish you all the best and look forward to seeing how they interact in Beacon as a whole.
No criticism is too harsh so hit me with your best shot.

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Changes were made in the fighting style, as well as a few other changes across the board. If anyone has any suggestions for improvements, I have a machine that can literally make me all ears
Nero LaFatch- Smoke Specter of team ATLA (Atlas): "Silent as Smoke"

Mura Sakino- Capricious Kitsune of Team CARM (Carmine): "I don't know how to respond to that..."

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Not sure if it's too important, but dude, just arrange the name Western style. My character Lien is Vietnamese/Chinese-ish and her name isn't arranged Eastern (yes, it's not just Japan, darling) style. You can put it in parentheses or something though, I did that. Tbh probs doesn't even matter, it's just... Japan and Asia doesn't exist and who knows how Mistralian names are arranged? We don't have anything concrete yet.
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Bianca Li(1st year member of team CBLT):"When you're the victim of the behavior, it's black and white; when you're the perpetrator, there are a million shades of gray." -Laura Schlessinger

Primrose Aster(1st year member of team BTRA):“To weep is to make less the depth of grief.”  -William Shakespeare

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Whenever I say style, I mean the overall character, such as I would have put Italian in front of Nero, but point taken.
Nero LaFatch- Smoke Specter of team ATLA (Atlas): "Silent as Smoke"

Mura Sakino- Capricious Kitsune of Team CARM (Carmine): "I don't know how to respond to that..."