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Attom Goldwyn
« on: November 19, 2018, 01:32:05 AM »
CHARACTER

Name: Attom Goldwyn

Age: 18 years old, 4 Niegre 62 AC

Species and Gender:  Human Male

Symbol: This is also his semblance symbol. It is mandala of the traditional chinese words for heart and gold.

 



Occupation: Hunter in training

Appearance: Long, straight, golden hair that goes down to the small of his back, that he ties into a ponytail or bun. His eyes are a sharp true blue. Most of his features are sharp and angular. He is thin, weighing in at 130lbs at being 5ft7in. His most distinguishing feature is a gold glowing piece of thunder dust merged with him in the center of his chest.

He dressed well to fight while in Beacon. He likes to wear flowing clothes. He is infamous for his dark blue top coat, gold vest, and dark blue dress pants. He tends to keep his shirts, gloves, and shoes white. Under his shirt and gloves he wears rubber to help ground the electricity and keep himself from exploding if he were to ever get hit with something with his aura down.

History:  Attom Goldwyn was born with a heart condition (arrhythmia) that his aura couldn’t be used to fix. He needed an expensive pacemaker to keep him alive, which his parents spent the money for, but it was a temporary solution. At the age of five the dust for the pacemaker would run out. They just couldn’t get the money in time to replace it but an old town’s person reminded Attom’s parents of dust fusion. It sounded like the better option to go to keep the pacemaker going and fusion could give it a longer cheaper fuel source than the alternative. This… fusion was pretty traumatizing. It never got better for him when he had to refuel the pacemaker, but he learned to hide his pain and fear for the good of others. The suppliers said refueling would always depend on how much dust crystal was fused into his body but he could usually tell that a dust crystal about the size of his palm would last him a year.

Attom Goldwyn grew up in the Vale town of Pactois. His mother was a stay at home mom while his father was a town guard. Being that Pactois was just on the on the outside of the ‘safe zone’ Attom’s dad had a very busy job. His mom was a worry wart that was afraid of grim, and wanted to keep her baby boy safe. She tried to give him what he needed but ended up coddling him and keeping him from other children his age.

His father eventually took him out to train him on how to defend himself. He recognized that Attom wasn’t physically strong so he had to be quick and quick witted to combat his foes. When his aura was unlocked, they both were reminded that the fused dust crystal that was usually inactive and practically harmless, could be wielded by Attom. But it was also discovered that it would drain the yearly supply for his pacemaker. They agreed to only use it as a last resort and use that a thunder dust crystal that was slightly bigger for now on for those occasions, just incase.

As Attom grew up he started to resent his mother and wanted to be a town guard like his father. His father told him that he taught him all he knew and he would have to learn the rest in the training academies.

While at Signal academy, he felt like he knew everything there was to know about hunting and only wanted to know more so he could unlock his semblance. After a quick kick in the pants by the academy professors, he soon learned there was more to it than just learning your semblance. It was about perfecting what you have, creating your weapon, and learning what you can and can’t do with your semblance. He unblocked his semblance during training and made his weapon there as well.


Personality:Attom has high hopes to become a good hunter and give back to the community that gave to him his start in hunting. His goal is for his home to become one of the next safe zone areas of Vale.

Attom may look very angular and standoffish, but he is really nice. He is very compassionate to others misery since he knows pain all too well. Because of his pain, he likes to take any chance he can get to celebrate, or party. In that way he is gregarious. As a little game he plays with friends, Attom tends to borrow things a lot and give them back at inopportune times or ways.

Being stuck at home you kind of pick up a few weird habits and fears as in: like not liking dirt at all, fear of death by uncontrolled electrical currents. He copes with this by being well neat and tidy, and explicitly showing others his boundaries like little to no hugs and chest contact. He tries to not to be scared when he has to fight others with electric weapons or ammo, but he tends to get very overprotective of his chest. He refuses to acknowledge any fears he has and writes them off as “Quirks”.

Aura and Semblance: With his gold aura he controls the semblance of his symbol (the gold circle with chinese words for “heart” and “gold” seen above). He can speed up however fast something is going through his semblance symbol or over his symbol up to eight times its original speed or slow it down up to eight times its original speed. He casts his symbol with a wave of his hand and the symbol can be placed on a surface like a coin. The symbol can be placed flat like a coin on the ground or up and down on its side. The symbol can extend past the size of the surface as long as some part is touching the surfas.

This can be dust infused to shoot dust coated things at opponents. He has control over how fast something is shot at an opponent. This works on dust, inanimate objects, willing aura users, and creatures of grimm. The size of the symbols diameter can very from the size of his hand to the size of himself standing up straight. If he or another person can move what they want to move through or over the symbol, it can and will fly fast in the direction what they are moving it at. The size of what can be moved goes up to about the size of a two door car.

Combat Behavior: Attom has been trained to fight quickly and outsmart his opponent. He likes to trash talk. He relies heavily on his semblance for movement, casting dust at his opponents, and shielding himself. He tries not to get into physical fights without his weapon because he’s terrible at dealing out damage without it. If he can lead his opponent into a trap, he will. He has to keep his chest protected at all times during a fight, because aura alone isn’t enough to protect a dust crystal all the time. He has to be careful not to overexert his heart either. He isn’t a very good team player but that’s something he’ll have to work on. He keeps coins in his pocket to use as surfaces for his semblance. He is afraid of opponents who use electric dust against him.


WEAPON

Name: Merlin

Primary Form: In Merlins primary form, its overall shape is a gilded/ornate pole that is about a meter long. At the very bottom of the poles handle is a rotating dust chamber slot where Attom can choose which dust he wants to use for his attack and push it in the center of the pole. The opposite end of the pole is where the dust is extruded thanks to a sharp crystal looking points that glow whatever dust color is being used. The whole pole is strong and maintained often to keep it’s mostly gold color.

Secondary Form: The bottom of the pole extends out with a twist of the handle to make Merlin staff sized. The handle, and dust trigger, is still in the middle-ish of the staff.


Dust Functions:
This baby is all dust function along with his dust infused semblance. He uses his semblance for ranged attacks with the same effects.

Fire: Burning an opponent for extra damage.
Ice: Freezing an opponent in place
Thunder: Electrical shock stunning an opponent or taking extra damage.
Earth: For throwing projectiles at opponents and used as a base to get coated in dust through the symbol.


« Last Edit: December 13, 2018, 03:53:37 PM by L-Money »
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Re: Attom Goldwyn
« Reply #1 on: November 20, 2018, 03:35:07 AM »
I feel you need a little more detail around the semblance. Firstly because if one symbol can add or cancel out kinetic force do you really need both? But secondly and more important we need limitations like how fast does it accelerate objects? Are there limits on the size of the object it can be put on? Can it be put on living people/grimm? How does it interact with aura? That sort of thing.
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Re: Attom Goldwyn
« Reply #2 on: November 20, 2018, 05:08:02 PM »
Stopping and starting kinetic energy is a bit OP, I agree. I decided to stick with one.

Here's the new Aura and Semblance:
"Aura and Semblance: With his gold aura he controls the semblance of his symbol (the gold circle with Chinese words for “heart” and “gold” seen above). He can speed up however fast something is going through his semblance symbol or over his symbol up to eight times its original speed. This can be dust infused to shoot dust coated things at opponents. He has control over how fast something is shot at an opponent. This works on dust, inanimate objects, aura users, and creatures of grimm. The size of the symbols diameter can very from the size of his hand to the size of himself standing up straight. If he or another person can move what they want to move through or over the symbol, it can and will fly fast in the direction what they are moving it at. The size of what can be moved goes up to about the size of a two-door car. "

I also added a little to personality and dust functions.
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Re: Attom Goldwyn
« Reply #3 on: November 21, 2018, 05:10:27 AM »
starting and stopping kinetic energy is fine it's just I didn't see why it needed two symbols which would do the same thing.

as for the ability itself beginning able to directly affect aura users is going to be a pretty hard no, it simply opens up too many auto-hit shenanigans by moving your opponents into the line of fire. Willing targets should be fine tho.

also how exactly does Attom apply these symbols to things?
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Re: Attom Goldwyn
« Reply #4 on: November 22, 2018, 08:08:08 PM »
I am glad I can keep the speed reduction. I was going to make the symblance like Weiss with floating platforms but I thought that would be less op if went with the symblance touched something.

Aura and Semblance: With his gold aura he controls the semblance of his symbol (the gold circle with chinese words for “heart” and “gold” seen above). He can speed up however fast something is going through his symblance symbol or over his symbol up to eight times its original speed or slow it down up to eight times its original speed. He casts his symbol with a wave of his hand and the symbol can be placed on a surface like a coin. The symbol can be placed flat like a coin on the ground or up and down on its side. The symbol can extend past the size of the surface as long as some part is touching the surface.
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Re: Attom Goldwyn
« Reply #5 on: November 24, 2018, 03:45:55 AM »
Looks good +1
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Re: Attom Goldwyn
« Reply #6 on: December 09, 2018, 05:18:57 AM »
Rewrote Attom's personality:

Personality:Attom has high hopes to become a good hunter and give back to the community that gave to him his start in hunting. His goal is for his home to become one of the next safe zone areas of Vale.

Attom may look very angular and standoffish, but he is really nice. He is very compassionate to others misery since he knows pain all too well. Because of his pain, he likes to take any chance he can get to celebrate, or party. In that way he is gregarious. As a little game he plays with friends, Attom tends to borrow things a lot and give them back at inopportune times or ways.

Being stuck at home you kind of pick up a few weird habits and fears as in: like not liking dirt at all, fear of death by uncontrolled electrical currents. He copes with this by being well neat and tidy, and explicitly showing others his boundaries like little to no hugs and chest contact. He tries to not to be scared when he has to fight others with electric weapons or ammo, but he tends to get very overprotective of his chest. He refuses to acknowledge any fears he has and writes them off as “Quirks”.
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Re: Attom Goldwyn
« Reply #7 on: December 13, 2018, 03:57:05 PM »
Had a minor formatting tip over discord, other than that character and profile are great, and I don't have anything to comment on.

2/2, approved and moved.

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