[ArtemisFowl7203]

Name:Artemis Noctis

Age:18
Species and Gender:Faunus,Female

Symbol:Eclipsed Moon
Occupation:Student/Huntress

Appearance: Fair skin, Royal blue eyes, Long Black Wavy Hair, 5'4 tall

History:Orphaned at a young age, raised by the White Fang, ran away at 18, is now a student at beacon

Personality: Sassy,Loyal,Kind,Loving,Confident

Aura and Semblance: Telekinetic
Combat Behavior: Calm: Tatical and Reserved
Angry: Doesn't think or hold back

Weapon: Lunae Mortem(name) is a scythe/bow/whip/rifle

[nathan67003]

You'll want to use the Template provided in Character Creation.

[Dr. Gustave]

Semblances do one thing and try to describe your own weapon. It won't be accepted as "A combination of Cresent Rose, Gambel Shroud, and a bow and quiver"

[Walter]

I suggest you take a look at the other character sheets on the site.

[earthworrior]

Sounds like a mixture of Blake and Cinder.

[CallMeDoc]

So it looks like you've made a lot of great changes so that's a start so kudos to you for that. If you don't mind I was gonna give a few suggestions. First of all if your a faunus, the board tends to like to know what kind (Only mammals if I'm correct, though I few birds have slipped through, just nothing crazy like a dragon or whatever). Appearance looks fine and I believe that's up to your discretion regarding how detailed it is. Your history is rather short, if you can try to expand it a tad more, did you go to combat school, how did your parents die, etc. stuff like that. A personal and slightly unspoken rule for the board, Don't Be Epic! Your character doesn't need to have a dramatic hero sob story, your fame will come at Beacon, that's the whole point of the board. These of the stories of how your character became known. Sorry if I was blunt but the board has a bit of a Mary/Gary Sue infestation at the moment if I might be so brash to say. As for your semblance that's where it get's tricky, I personally have a telekinetic semblence waiting to be approved that your free to look at a draw from, the board typically asks for statistics regarding your limits and what your semblence is capable of. Rye (my character) can only lift up to 300 ibs without staining himself and only control objects within a 10 ft radius, he is a 3rd year if that put's things in perspective. Combat behavior could use some improvement in regards to more detail, what is she good at, what are her weaknesses, does she work better alone (like a duelist) or is she a tank (like yang) stuff like that. Your weapon also could use a fair amount of TLC to be honest... Typically weapons have only 2 to 3 forms and that includes it's storage form. There have been some who have pulled off more complex weapons but not often. If you can describe how it has so many forms and how it transforms then it should be fine, though weapons are not exactly my field of expertise so you may wish to ask someone else for help in that regard. The biggest thing you need to do is look at other characters that have been approved (probably other first years if possible) and use the template otherwise you can't even get it looked at. Best of luck and have fun on the board!