[Capta1n_Henry]

Done with the character backstory. I'm not a great writer so sorry if some stuff is left out or it just doesn't make sense

[EdgeyReyes]

Just would like to say a few things about the history which stood out.

- Canon characters: This site doesn't take use of any of the main characters or supporting cast from RWBY. Self-explainatory why I mentioned this is because of the use of Blake's dad. While mention of his name is only a little piece this would mean that Blake would exist. So simple edit can change that, maybe a nameless leader could do.

- Occupation and Age: Just as a mention you say that he is infact a 4th year,while possible to be a 4th year at 19 it would have to be very special circumstances to which he would of been accepted 2 - 3 years depending on his birthday. I would suggest moving his age up to the 21 or 22 which would be the norm for the students within the 4h year.

Those are really the only issues I found. Might read it again later and take a closer look but feels to be pretty solid at the moment.

[Capta1n_Henry]

Done and done. Thank you very much!

[Capta1n_Henry]

Are there any other problems with this character?

[The Mythic Scribe]

I'm not sure because I'm going to be honest and say I didn't read the profile but right off the bat I'm just going to give you a piece of advice: First years get all the fun. There aren't very many fourth years on this board and I'd think that would impede your efforts to get a team and rp with them.

Still, if you want him to be a fourth year, go for it.

[Capta1n_Henry]

Thanks for the advice, but I think I'll keep him as a fourth year. I'll remember this for future characters though.

[The Mythic Scribe]

Aye aye, Cap'n. Oh look, your user's actually Captain Henry, that's fun.

A few things:
-The White Fang probs isn't old enough to be around when Juno was young. I'm thinking 50s-60s for her, but if she's younger than that it may be fine. A note is that on this board the White Fang get violent and all that shit nine years ago, so Juno probably wouldn't have quit until then. Unless it was more about focusing on her job or whatever. Not too big a deal.
-Why were Acero's parents killed though? And why would the killer want to go after him but then only burn him and not finish the job? For that matter, why'd he come to Acero at all? To gloat and give away the fact that he killed them, giving away his secret and making it so he had a threat to look out for?
-I'm no expert on prosthetics, but I'm sure that it takes more than a week to give someone prosthetic limbs. First you've gotta measure and size and resize, there's paperwork and shit, and then it takes some time for the limbs to actually be made and arrive. Not sure how long this would take, but definitely longer than a week. Also there's no reason for the limbs to be put on when he was sleeping.

[Capta1n_Henry]

Aye aye, Cap'n. Oh look, your user's actually Captain Henry, that's fun.

A few things:
-The White Fang probs isn't old enough to be around when Juno was young. I'm thinking 50s-60s for her, but if she's younger than that it may be fine. A note is that on this board the White Fang get violent and all that shit nine years ago, so Juno probably wouldn't have quit until then. Unless it was more about focusing on her job or whatever. Not too big a deal.
-Why were Acero's parents killed though? And why would the killer want to go after him but then only burn him and not finish the job? For that matter, why'd he come to Acero at all? To gloat and give away the fact that he killed them, giving away his secret and making it so he had a threat to look out for?
-I'm no expert on prosthetics, but I'm sure that it takes more than a week to give someone prosthetic limbs. First you've gotta measure and size and resize, there's paperwork and shit, and then it takes some time for the limbs to actually be made and arrive. Not sure how long this would take, but definitely longer than a week. Also there's no reason for the limbs to be put on when he was sleeping.

Ok, how's it now?

[Dr. Gustave]

The white fang was formed following the faunus war so... 43 AC in our timeline. They turned violent 71 AC, and the current year is 80 AC, since it is December so we'll be moving to 81 AC soon.

[Capta1n_Henry]

Ok, changed the White Fang stuff

[Capta1n_Henry]

So uh, is this character good to go 

[EdgeyReyes]

Copy your character into another post in the main character creation thread. You need the two approvals there and then after those two approvals then you are free to start rping.

[Capta1n_Henry]

Ok thank you!